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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2018-07-18 05:05 AM



The gloom of rainy skies
brought comfort like
an old gray sweatshirt.
I could move around unfettered.
My world became large
and my movements loose.
The old gray sweatshirt
allowed me entrance
to the out of doors
in the middle of the day.
It had freedom
written all over it.

LGR(C)7/18/18


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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2018-07-18 12:03 PM



Ya "got" me, Lori. I had not the faintest idea where "Old Gray Sweatshirt" was going.
But now, after reading the end of your poem, I was delighted to say the least.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
2 posted 2018-07-20 04:53 AM


The heat just kills me! Had a little fender bender the other day and had to wait on the officer to arrive. I was in the direct sun at 3:00 for about 5 minutes and the rest of the time (30 min) I hid in the shade of a tree.
It took a good 45 minutes after I got home to get cooled back down again. UGH! ~L

jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
3 posted 2018-08-16 10:05 PM


Wonderful piece and last two lines were perfect ending...

j.

2islander2
Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
4 posted 2018-08-18 08:28 AM


we need clothes even for writing such elegant poems like yours, lovely hommage and surprising too


yann

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere
5 posted 2018-08-19 05:28 AM


Jimmy,
I'm delighted you liked this one and it's ending. Thanks for letting me know! ~L

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
6 posted 2018-08-19 05:29 AM


Yann,
You give the coolest compliments! Thanks! ~L

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