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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Don't know why I like these long acoustic guitar folk song types of lyrics but they just come out that way.....Ah what the hey anyway....LOL! I know this stuff ain't commercial but then everything I do every day is so it's just an escape. Conpromise Those high school sweetheart days we lived, Testing out the so called sins We'd sing in sunsets spilling gold I remember songs we wrote. Sittin on the graveyard fence your searchin body so intense my guitar strung against the world, you right there my steady girl mothered me just like a boy I smothered you like a toy. The world was ours at seventeen me for you and you for me. In the heat we'd sing a toast to King and Taylor's lyric rotes, the words of life we recognized would mask the truth with compromise One on one a sculpture carved together we were modern art. A model for the world to see we'd sing of change with words of peace. We were clean and music deep just like moonlight on the sea. We lived fairy tales of hope brand new home the future wrote. We made plans for endless tasks working on our dreams to last. Those growing years we spent together we thought they'd go on forever. But the nature of the boy singing songs telling stories opened doors beyond the stage here tommorrow gone today. When the praises came to rest I tried to fight them with my best but the change from boy to man can blanket many early plans. The years upon your welcome breast have stayed with me at heart no less. But I booked to other spoils some freedom from our midnight oil. Now I sing the tavern shift a folksey rover with a gift. But there's a lost unheard verse that can't explain our love and work So I play us but there's no you, just beer drenched bars and late reviews. But when it comes down to the truth there was no gamble in our youth. Swept away by rushing tides we filled the needs we craved inside. But changes flow from buried streams an surface in the thoughts we breed. it's never final past the end Cause in the chorus I hear a friend. The world was ours at seventeen me for you and you for me. In the heat we'd sing a toast to King and Taylor's lyric rotes, the words of life we recognized would mask the truth with compromise true love never looks after it's own interests |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ahhh . . . This is almost a novelette, Eric. But you told of life and as your title suggested a compromising way of writing. Each stanza had me going back to my youthful days, each one told my story also. I was really delighted with this absolute jewel. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
a song, a poem, an outburst of thoughts and feelings - it makes no difference - a beautful piece. Note: in second to last stanza, first word of last sentence, should that be 'cause, referencing the word because ? Again, wonderful read, my friend! j. |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
Everyone here has been seventeen, no doubt and the struggles of Janis Ian come to mind. ...just bein' Bluesy |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Jerry, I guess we all can relate to parts of this acoustic ramble and that's great if I was able to take you there.... Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks for those words JW I appreciate the read and visit and yes "cause" is supposed to reference the word because, sort of a singing meter thing. But don't worry I'm half crazy anyway.... Best regards! Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Bluesy I agree we all have our past reflections. Janis Ian song was a great one for sure. Actually was song of the year way back then....... Probably helped her pay a lot of bills.... Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I think you may have missed my point. My understanding is the word cause (caws) in your piece is short for because (cuz) . If that's true it should have and apostrophe (') before the word; as in 'cause (cuz) . - 'Cause (cuz) is short for Because. For ex., I was late 'cause (because) I overslept. - Cause (caws) is the underlying reason for something. For ex., Oversleeping was the cause of my being late. j. |
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Starmcneil 1955 Member Posts 174 Alberta, Canada |
Oh yes, a song from the past and from the heart...your words sing true and bring back some memories to me...well done |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I love your take on 17 although I would not wish to do it again. |
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