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rainyday
Member
Posts 304
Heartland USA

0 posted 2016-09-06 02:27 AM

Where Canoes Sleep~

Where canoes sleep,
Late Summer kisses
Curl within a shimmer
of sunburst leaves,
Cradled for a time
In henna embrace,
Slow release
To the inevitable ache,
The fall to a cool earth
Of bittersweet rest.

Oh breezes..take me home,
Let me leave my footprints there,
Tell of the trees scarlet secrets
In calico language,
Lead me to the hazy
wistful heart of Autumn,
Through mystic passage,
The fog..my ferryman,
Let me visit that place
Where canoes sleep.

Jan~
rainyj

Ari Squire
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Posts 488
In The Phallus Lane

1 posted 2016-09-06 03:54 AM

quote:
"Lead me to the hazy wistful heart of Autumn, Through mystic passage, The fog..my ferryman"

I love the voice in your poetry Jan. Because of that, I could have quoted your entire poem, however these lines that I did quote are my most favored. I also love the title and the soft, serene close.

Loving Linny Jean is poetry.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2016-09-06 09:38 AM

Heh! Henna. I remember when I was growing up the women all used what they called a henna rinse for their hair. Smelled awful.

Okay! Got that thought out of my mind. This was a stylish poem with wishful thoughts to return to that place "where canoes sleep." I love that phrase and everything it conjures up. Nice work, Jan.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (09-06-2016 10:32 AM).]

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2016-09-06 08:13 PM

Really pretty, love the visual in my minds eye where a couple of canoes are tucked away in the Marsh rocking on the ripples of an autumn breeze.

Wonderful poem, kudos good poetess.

Elizabeth

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since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

4 posted 2016-09-13 07:47 AM

I had the same image as BluesSerenade when I read this. Ah, autumn by the lake....

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

5 posted 2016-09-14 01:12 AM

i loved the title and the colors of the poem, like a journey in my mind, thanks

yann

Redstart
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since 2014-05-16

Posts 535

6 posted 2016-09-14 08:14 PM

There's room for colours in Alaska.

EmmaRose
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since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

7 posted 2016-09-23 07:03 PM

a mystical delight, can feel the Autumn colors

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2016-09-27 11:45 PM

enjoyed reading this...james

Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

9 posted 2016-10-02 02:38 PM

The autumn colors are most appreciated while the leaves are still hanging in there before the pumpkins meet the first frost.
Raking leaves prepares the back for a long season of snow removal

rainyday
Member
Posts 304
Heartland USA

10 posted 2016-10-04 09:26 PM

Thank you one & all Dear Poets
for the lovely replies.

rainyj

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