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Pete_W
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Posts 185
Scotland (UK)

0 posted 2016-05-12 06:55 PM


Barnhill Bay.

The day dips down,
a dwindling bowl
of rose-mauve sky
below a headland
ebbing in a mirror sea.
Each ripple rushes
to an echo in the bay,
gulls face westward
and a solitary robin
draws the shadow of my pen.

Two-toed tracks
of a doe and her fawn
trace eastward
over tide-fresh sand,
past the shallow dock,
long disused,
its vanished boat,
the wake of whispered prayers
offered every evening
by the abbey’s gable end.

Overhead
translucent
yellow fingered leaves
linger luminous
in dying light,
beyond their fraying hands
the gathered cloud,
an imminence of rain,
slim hope for open skies
and stars.

March 2016


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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
1 posted 2016-05-12 07:01 PM


This is such a beautiful poetic painting.  There is a quiet peace and serenity that transcends through these blue pages.

Very well done, Pete...

Cari
Member
Posts 411
Englnand
2 posted 2016-05-13 09:18 AM


If you’re looking for escape from the rat race and far away from the Madding Crowd then you could do worse then to settle for Barnhill Bay.
Not sure if the house where Orwell wrote ‘84’ is still available there but that would add interest. We had a holiday with the kids on the edge of Loch Shiel though that’s in the Western Isles.

A very good poem on the beauty of seclusion, the sea and open landscapes.

Cari.

jjote
Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2016-05-13 09:33 AM


lovely images I can'teven get a fill of them, it's as if my cup is brimming over the rim..I don't know where this place is, but I can imagine its utter tranquility. enjoyed.
JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
4 posted 2016-05-13 10:58 AM


Kickass poetry, my man!

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Pete_W
Member
Posts 185
Scotland (UK)
5 posted 2016-05-14 06:49 AM


Thanks for the kind comments. Barnhill Bay is quite close to Aberdour, opposite the Isle of Inchcolm, where the ruined abbey is, and beyond that over the Forth are the lights of Edinburgh.
Pete

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2016-06-01 01:17 AM


enjoyed reading this...james
2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
7 posted 2016-06-01 04:57 PM


delicious painting with nature company and subtle colors, enjoyed


yann

latearrival
Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499
Florida
8 posted 2016-06-01 10:26 PM


I just read and saw within my mind a beautiful View of nature, Thank you,Pete-W  Jo Perry
latearrival
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since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499
Florida
9 posted 2016-06-01 10:33 PM


Pete Thank you for this beautiful visual. I enjoyed it very much Best to you ,JO
JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
10 posted 2016-06-04 04:50 PM


A pleasantry of visuals all around each verse.

Nice write, Pete_W.

JL

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Ari Squire
Member
Posts 488
In The Phallus Lane
11 posted 2016-06-06 10:52 PM


I'm so into agreement on the visuals in your poem Pete, and the delicate manner in which you write them.

This line in particular struck a chord for me:
quote:
"a solitary robin
draws the shadow of my pen.

You're a talented poet Pete.

More feelings and fewer words please

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
12 posted 2016-06-12 06:10 PM


I so enjoyed the serenity of the lapping waves, the settling of dusk, and the slight breeze to catch the wing of the company you keep.
jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
13 posted 2016-06-13 10:43 AM


Ah, good tale, well written and felt...much enjoyed,

j.

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