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ice
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since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2016-01-05 07:40 AM


         

*VAHNIPATANA

Another time, again,
Orange yellow-cuts, bleeding
Flares of heated colors.
She is flint-he is steel;
Iron has fondled rock-
Starting flame enough
To melt obsidian.

Rain talks, in slanted streaks
But word force has no meaning,
Passing through, on fire Fabric-
Cannot speak loud enough;
The inferno steams,
Her mind shield
Fogged, submits to heat,
That no voice can put out.

Pistons connected-
By wrist pins
Turn concentric
On crankshaft hips,
Frictioning-cylinder strokes,
Lilith inspired-
Slow at first burning
Diesel , then gas
Explodes her face;
She hands him her fee
For several morts petite.

The sacrificial lambs
Try to transcend evil
But human guile is ruse
Is no jive-;
When  sulfur smokes-
It's too late to escape..
The stairway burns
Away beneath them.

*Sanskrit: "vahnipatana"  (वह्निपतन. ) n. "entering the fire"

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Ticklefingers
Senior Member
Posts 710
Louisiana
1 posted 2016-01-05 02:19 PM


quote:
"Pistons connected-
By wrist pins
Turn concentric
On crankshaft hips"
This is a marvel of emotional engineering ice.

Only a poet who has spent some 'serious' time under a hood would appreciate the vernacular in the way you have applied it here.

Very well done indeed!


88's friend  

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

ice
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since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
2 posted 2016-01-06 05:37 AM


Thank you for your reply..
I have fun with metaphor, as reality is sometimes too harsh.

"Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance."
Carl Sandburg

rainyday
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Posts 304
Heartland USA
3 posted 2016-01-07 03:47 PM


Yes..your metaphors are striking Ice!
Made me think sacrificial..in more ways then one.

rainy

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