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Open Poetry #49

No One Told Me About Her

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2015-11-16 08:37 PM

No One Told Me About Her

It was only after
way too many years
that I was able to
accept the truth,
that Suzie Land wasn't real.
Oh, it was real enough
but for all the wrong reasons;
it was a relationship
with a short shelf life
that lived for long seasons,
but when I thought
I needed it the most
it simply was not there,
it was off in never-ever land,
just like they sang in the song;
"She's not there."

She's Not There / The Zombies / Chorus

"Well let me tell you 'bout the way she looked
The way she'd act and the color of her hair
Her voice was soft and cool
Her eyes were clear and bright
But she's not there."

Trust in the Lord
and do good...
Shalom.

JamesLee
11/16/15

rainyday
Member
Posts 304
Heartland USA

1 posted 2015-11-16 09:31 PM

JM, I like the way you tied this to the song,it was cleverly done..& oh the lessons life can hand us.

rainyday J

Ticklefingers
Senior Member
Posts 710
Louisiana

2 posted 2015-11-17 12:12 PM

I'm with rainyday James.

88's friend

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

Constance
Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 393
Ohio

3 posted 2015-11-17 05:39 PM

I really enjoyed this one, James! Good story told with energy and fluidity. Your title made me think of the lyric right away. This poem did NOT disappoint.

smiles,
Constance

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2015-11-17 10:47 PM

Thank you rainyday, Ticklefingers and Constance for the nice responses...james

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