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jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2015-11-15 10:23 PM

You mean to convey passion
but your voice is devoid of it
your words a dagger
come straight at my heart.

I cannot respond to these fusillades
I can only deflect, counter,
invent excuses
turn cold
and shiver in the night.

It's but a sham
this cat-and-mouse game we play
what small minds we have!

Or maybe, we're just
two cats fighting in the alley.

As we run out of claws
to scratch each other to death
I realize
it's really no loss
washing you right out
of my hair.

@jjote 11162015

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2015-11-16 10:05 AM

Eh . . . When it's time to go it's time to go . . .

~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Namyh
Senior Member

since 2009-01-20

Posts 988

2 posted 2015-11-16 02:55 PM

Jjote - When the airport agent asks me "Who packed your bags?", I will definitely say.....I DID! Nice work. Namyh

[This message has been edited by Namyh (11-16-2015 04:52 PM).]

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2015-11-16 08:40 PM

I watched a few catfights...they are very in to it...james

rainyday
Member
Posts 304
Heartland USA

4 posted 2015-11-18 11:52 PM

jjote, Definitely know this feeling.
Great closing line.

rainyday J

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2015-11-18 11:59 PM

Thanks all for your comments and varied take on this. Makes me realize again that what one writes actually belongs to the reader and how it appeals to him. Very rewarding and eye opener to the writer

Mr Martini
Member
Posts 366
Beneath The Line

6 posted 2015-11-19 01:23 AM

Your last lines recall splendor in the South Pacific.

Here's to you and here's to me and should we ever disagree, here's to me!

Pete_W
Member
Posts 185
Scotland (UK)

7 posted 2015-11-19 06:31 AM

Very fast paced, enjoyed the antipathy running through this.
Thanks
pete

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

8 posted 2015-11-19 08:33 AM

Yes Mr. M. I loved that movie, does it show how ancient I am. Pete, appreciate your comment

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

9 posted 2015-11-19 11:15 AM

Sometime a good shampoo is just what the Dr. ordered. Here's to clearing your head! ~L

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