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A Most Difficult Poem
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A Most Difficult Poem |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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my poem went on a strike a hunger strike wouldn’t even drink water that was an immediate concern my poem grew morose, like a pampered child I tried to bribe it with money it laughed in my face that hurt I picked it up whispered loving things to it it worked life was coming back to my poem it demanded food drank all the water I had offered after a literary burp my poem punched me until I was silly ripped off all the money I had the clothes off my back walked away using my comb to tame its wild hair said . . . I’m going over to your girlfriend’s house ©June 25, 2015 / Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Ah...now might you be saying something about the fickle nature of our beloved poems? My how some do drive us to our wits end. I think our Muses aren't even amused! Sounds like this one of yours was really making a play for your attention by pushing your buttons! ~L |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I have many unfinished poems just sitting and waiting for me to do them some justice and I doubt I ever will. This is just a nonsensical look at all those unwritten poems. Thanks, Lori, for your thoughts on it. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Oh.. sweet gawds..lol.. you are killin me this morn with laughter. ty. This "take-over via studly poem w/attitude" is simply great! "wouldn’t even drink water" ~this is so concerning, indeed.. until you flip to the ironic "I've been had" lines.. still in lol w/head-shakes.. your Comb aaand ur gf, ouch. Have a fancy day, Jerry, this is a big fav! ~T "..But a tyrant spell has bound me, |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
So happy you received some pleasure from my nonsensical foray into the non-literary, non-poetical thoughts of mine, Tanya . . . ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
funny nonsense, enjoyed. Sometimes the muse needs a lot of cajoling |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, jjote. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
the poem or your clone...james |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Whatever james. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Loved the humor in this one. Not being a poet I never have to fear those dry times.I only write what comes into my mind after reading what others write. Best to you, jo |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Oh hell, jo, you are a poet. Appreciate your fine thoughts this morning. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
Jerry, this is remarkably similar to "The Poem You Asked For" by Larry Livis? Different words, yes, but the theme, events, and even the structure is virtually identical. It's on page 3 of this book, available for reading using Amazon's "Look Inside" feature. http://www.amazon.com/exec/obidos/ASIN/0822941414/poetsonline/ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hah! Yeah you're right, Ron. Hope you aren't thinking plagiarism. Could be I had read that poem before and later on when I started writing this poem images came to me from earlier reading of the poem. Still, I don't recall ever reading it before and I know I don't have the book. Eh! Nope, ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Hi, Jerry! I've got 5 or 6 unfinished poems now, so I understand you very well! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yep, it is a common problem among the writers of prose, etc. Thanks for stopping by. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I had forgotten all about this poem (the last line did seem to ring a bell) and my response. Memory is a fickle thing. I was just thinking how I hadn't read anything from you lately and I was delighted to find this "new" poem. Ha! Joke's on me! Take care! ~L |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks, Lori, for your comments on my poem. I haven't posted on here lately too much. Old story, not enough traffic to interest me. Ahhh . . . But you are back, I'll post one now. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: This is great and your conclusion is absolutely ingenious! Margherita  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks, Margherita, appreciate your comments. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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