Open Poetry #49 |
The Empty Garden |
SilentShadow Junior Member
since 2006-04-20
Posts 32Fl. U.S.A. |
There will never be another to fill the space I made for you There will never be another who loves you quite the way I do But time is running out, slipping by ever closer to the end You realize what you passed by was more than just a friend The emptiness comes creeping in no matter what you do But the emptiest of any space is the place I made for you... |
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SilentShadow Junior Member
since 2006-04-20
Posts 32Fl. U.S.A. |
Thank you to Balladeer and the PIP staff for helping me recover my account. I don't post often, only when inspired, I don't sit down to write, only when it hits me,,, like a sledgehammer, but that's my style,,, sledgehammer poetry. I hope it hits you too, and resonates within you~~ SilentShadow |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This definitely does resonate.. and then just aches in the emptiness on ending. well done! ~d "..But a tyrant spell has bound me, |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
This is very good, I feel the emptiness . . . ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
nice writing...james |
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Southernfury New Member Posts 5 |
This breaks my heart :'( because i know why you wrote it |
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Southernfury New Member Posts 5 |
One day love that emptiness will be filled... but a hauntingly beautiful way to describe the feeling |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Understanding and feeling for your loss. latearrival |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
It takes a lot of courage to bare out your soul, especially the pain of loss and emptiness. Even when people say you should move on, inside you still want to cling to the memories. Nice write. |
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