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the wanting's "was"
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the wanting's "was" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I ache on Tuesday nights because I did not get my Monday love. On Wednesday's I get paranoid-- because I feel a throbbing void. And yes, it is quite possible for emptiness to fossile us humans into what was love, in layers of the pain of dust impacted by the stomping of our foot upon the wanting's was of how it used to be (so sweet) I love you. I hope you love me. Forgive me, for my little rhyme. I miss you love. I miss you, "MINE". I won't pretend that this is art-- just another bloody heart that Hallmark would not pay me for... I love you, love you, love you more. I thought that was impossible; but ask The Bear, and fishrock too if I'm not a faithful tear rolling down your cheek--I'm HERE... sending you my troth. |
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ponderthepoetorrsx Member
since 2011-06-25
Posts 284U.S , Ca |
loved it |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Whoaaaaa! Karen! Talk about a Hallmark moment, this is a Karen snapshot. And rhyming too. I love it, I love your heart and very active brain power. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
this is just perfect, serenity, the perfect tone, the exquisite confession, thanks for the so moving poem, yann |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I'm loving this too! Lori  |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
a perhaps all-too-common set of human experiences well captured in this 'write'! ... that 'only the lonely' might truly understand and appreciate. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"And yes, it is quite possible for emptiness to fossile us humans into what was love, in layers of the pain of dust" Great lines as are all the rest. It crys real poetic blues girl. I'll call those Hallmark jerks and set them straight. After all, a girl's gotta have her pay for such pain. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Loved the same lines as Ethome, and also very much agree with his response.  |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Liked your poem, Serenity. The first two lines were my favorite. Smiles, ms. e |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Hallmark can't handle this much truth. *S* Or maybe they just don't want their stores to face lawsuits from all the "slip and falls" on aisles filled with tears. Understanding... and sending ((((HUGS)))) |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
Written from the heart of a poet whose muse understands her...well done...*HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
sigh... wanting the "was"... yes, ain't that the truth. Beautifully and wistfully written, as only you can |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Stupid Hallmark! Ida |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
loved and felt every word...  M |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You never cease to amaze me. I loved this! quote: Great line! Michael |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
~*~ And yes, it is quite possible for emptiness to fossile us humans into what was love, in layers of the pain of dust impacted by the stomping of our foot upon the wanting's was ~*~ Oh my dear friend how well I know this ache. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"And yes, it is quite possible for emptiness to fossile us..." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice one...James |
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ramisf Member
since 2007-05-17
Posts 93 |
Beautiful .... I wish i can be one if your weekdays ... in order to share poems with you |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
reading again, just because M |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I loved this!! I felt every word. Great work. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
"if I'm not a faithful tear rolling down your cheek-" Hugs You! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I like this lots, serenity. Lots and lots. A |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
aching love is something I have not had for a very long time..though i do have love. I like that way it is written here. |
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brian thomas madden Junior Member
since 2010-07-08
Posts 32Ireland (between an ocean and a rock) |
your words have always touched me Karen, and this is no different. raw and passionate. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Now I seem to remember a sweet lady named Ms. Blaze....and tho you never would submit to my flirting I did fantasize? How are ya sweetie???? |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
wow, understanding this, so poignant, am with you all the way to sending troth, for mine is packed up, was too fragile, and so I put it away to protect it from further hurt...sigh anyway great write for all of us who were once so passionate and so 'in love'...sigh |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen...Hugs and love to you for touching so deeply. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Beautifully written and so pain filled it reminds me of that longing, that yearning that aches throbbing like a toothache which nags constantly. Wonderful piece so well constructed I love it x as always Mushy x x x x x x x Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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