Three Steps To Storm Clouds

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Open Poetry #48

Three Steps To Storm Clouds

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

0 posted 2013-07-14 01:31 AM

Ah,
cold bitter apathies,
memories
of hatreds' horrors decorating trees,
miseries
broken dreams of dawn,
singulars,
multitudes,
generations
swallowing harsh acid taste
of years' long empty seconds
watching children
left to waste;

uglies flail their ancient claws,
gates of Hell have prissy jaws
even old Beelzebub wears lace;

watch the spreading forearm fields,
rankly rosy kiss,
maps to modern treasure troves
of vacillating jests,
the lost, the cost,
to know the frost
is laughter's blackest bite,
the barred,
scarred
tarred and feathered,
glaring at the white.

©2003, 2013 by icebox

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2013-07-14 08:47 AM

My goodness, Charly, your words are as sharp as a knife that explores the wounds of this modern world, when we don't close our eyes to all the abhorrent things that happen.

To take notice is the first step to react. You reacted with a masterful poem that invites us to awaken and act to improve and heal what can be improved and healed.

Excellent work.

Margherita

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2013-07-14 09:02 AM

Excellent direction this poem took, especially today with all eyes focused at one particular spot. There is a transparency within the lines that cause me to nod my head and wonder if it will ever end. Thank you for your insightful poem.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

3 posted 2013-07-14 09:12 AM

Bravo!

A justified indignation I can get behind. Excellent write!

Lori

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

4 posted 2013-07-14 10:12 AM

Excellent depictions. Liked the flow as well. Nicely done.

Michael

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

5 posted 2013-07-14 10:03 PM

Depicted this masterfully! Changes...some too fast and some much too slowly...

Miscellanea

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

6 posted 2013-07-15 03:37 AM

Biting reality served straight from the icebox.
Ida

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