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The Sleeper
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The Sleeper |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief 
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She creeps in and lingers there just behind consciousness, and cognition; distracting, disrupting, destroying, eating away. My hands are shaking. My mind is racing twirling spinning dizzying thoughts collide. Push her OUT! -but she will not go. Manipulative to the end, She brings me to the edge grabs the collar of my shirt and leans me over…. F A L L I N G the ground rushes up the room is shrinking the walls are bleeding my heart is pounding pounding PoUnDiNg LOUDER!!!! Then she retreats, slipping back behind reality. Cunningly she bides her time breaking me slowly. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This sounds to me like fear grabbing our minds and your poetic rendering is very powerful. But our inner strength is at hand to paint the "bleeding walls" in candid white again. Not an easy task, but it's worth trying. Margherita |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Demons can be deadly. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
It was an attempt to write out an anxiety/panic attack. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You perfectly succeeded in your intent, such attacks are indeed frightening from what I have heard. Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I really liked the way you chose to express the feelings one is overcome with in a panic attack. Kudos2u for an excellent write! -Coco- |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Very well done, Effigy. Ida |
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