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Crunch, Crunch
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Crunch, Crunch |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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crunch of gravel footsteps in the dead of night only light in the room computer's monitor blinds on the window are bent in a couple of places he can see me through the bent blinds he can see me I cannot see him a fearful man I am not I've stood up to them all still . . . I'm not as young as I once was and what I can't see in the dark has always bothered me crunch, crunch he's creeping slowly now what does he want? no, I don't want to know the answer the door is locked isn't it? of course it is I always lock up before dark if I live through this night I'm buying a gun should have already purchased one better him than me I shut off the computer now he can't see me either I feel, or sense footsteps on the porch soft sounds as pressure is placed on the floor if I listen hard enough I can almost hear the man breathing what does he want? this is not a social visit no whoever is beyond the walls of this house is up to no good I hear him trying the doorknob I must get up there are large knives in the kitchen I need to be holding one of them I've never been so afraid I'm powerless to move the only thing I can use as a weapon is in my shirt pocket ball point pen if this is a dream I wish I would wake up if this is insanity I . . . ©April 20, 2013 / Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ I stayed up all night to see where the sun went. Then it dawned on me. ~*~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh my, dear Jerry, you know something about suspense!! I was getting ready to shake in fear throughout your write. I have experienced similar moments, checking windows and doors ... uuuuhhhh ... Excellent write! As you have written about it I smile knowing you are ok! Margherita |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Strange how the night affects us at certain times. Thank you, Margherita, for the Crunch, Crunch comments. Boo! Heh.Heh ~*~ I stayed up all night to see where the sun went. Then it dawned on me. ~*~ |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Had me on the edge of my seat, Jerry. Ida |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hah! Thanks, Ida for stopping by on the dark of the night. ~*~ I stayed up all night to see where the sun went. Then it dawned on me. ~*~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
This one sure grabs you, Jer... and now we all NEED to know how it ended... who it was... etc. For me, it probably would have been somone serving me legal papers of some sort :/ ... Maybe you have better luck though. And though I have (mostly unintentionally) hurt many people with my pen, I cringe at the thought of having to defend myself in a physical altercation with it. 'Could feel the desperation in those lines. Well done, my friend. Michael |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks Michael. In the next poem it would probably go something like this. I would have purchased that gun (already have one) and when I heard the doorknob being tried I would empty it into the door, and come to learn later my neighbor had see the man, called the sheriff's department and I had just shot and killed a sheriff's deputy. Oh woe! ~*~ I'm reading a book about anti-gravity. I can't put it down. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Great write Jerry! Gave me the creeps! I hate that! Lori:-) |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Sorry about giving you the creeps Lori, thanks anyway for checking me out. ~*~ I'm reading a book about anti-gravity. I can't put it down. ~*~ |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
A real Thriller! I liked how it ended with the pen being the only weapon for defense. Very appropriate for a writer I thought. Enjoyed! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yeah you're right about the only weapon he had, it had to be, it had to be. Appreciate you honoring me with your presence, Bob. ~*~ I'm reading a book about anti-gravity. I can't put it down. ~*~ |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Good suspense, Jerry. I have had nights like this - and I sure hate them. A |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yeah Alison, it is a horrifying situation when you think somebody is near by who wants to cause you trouble. Thank you for your input on my poem, it is appreciated. ~*~ PMS jokes aren't funny, period. ~*~ |
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