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EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

0 posted 2013-05-14 12:58 PM

I swept through your offerings
at the height of the harvest
in abundant descension
all had surrounded me,
the scarlets were carolling
at a butterfly's cadence
shrouding the jogger's trail
i had almost lost sight of them,
if not for the renegade
the one that had atrophied
its colors anemic
from last season's collection,
though somehow it lingered, somehow it
preservered, yet it was homeless
many moons from its mother tree.

Lighthousebob
Member Elite

since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

1 posted 2013-05-14 03:27 PM

Perhaps it found a home? Perhaps?

Enjoyed this little stroll of yours with Mother Nature.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2013-05-14 04:40 PM

How incredibly captivating, dear EmmaRose. Persevering can be painful, until someone takes notice ... love your inspiration.

Margherita

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

3 posted 2013-05-17 09:44 PM

I love this, EmmaRose. It is beautiful and so captivating. I love fall and I love these two lines in particular ~

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the scarlets were carolling
at a butterfly's cadence
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Stunning.

Alison

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2013-05-17 09:53 PM

I am almost sure I commented on this, but I don't see my name on any of the comments, so . . . maybe not. Taking what you can at the height of the offering is a splendid way to come out ahead. I particularly liked the face that one lone butterfly survived looking haggard and homeless. Beautiful!

~*~ PMS jokes aren't funny, period. ~*~

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

5 posted 2013-05-18 02:50 AM

This is so beautifully EmmaRose, and thank goodness for that last renegade leaf - though, secretly, I know that you wouldn't have lost sight of all that beauty, being EmmaRose! I drank every word of this in, with all my senses and then some. I don't think you even know how to write a mediocre poem. Every one of yours is a masterpiece.

Owl

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

6 posted 2013-05-18 08:02 AM

thank you so much for your thoughts on my thoughts, it is very nice when you stop by
to read me

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