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OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
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Durban, South Africa

0 posted 2013-05-04 03:55 AM



Consequences
29 April 2013

You laughter-leap me
under sun-flecked waterfalls;
you sing my heart
soft sunshine-warm;
you cascade my words
in gurgling laughter-streams,
you race my blood,
hot, wild and crazy
and I melt
into your electric arms.

Owl

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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
1 posted 2013-05-07 01:11 AM


hello Diana, this is breath taking, you really point what love make us shivering, delightful images of what we can feel in these particular moments,


have a nice day,


yann


OwlSA
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2 posted 2013-05-07 03:21 AM


Thank you for your lovely reply, Yann.

You, too, have a nice day.

Owl

Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14
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California
3 posted 2013-05-07 06:24 PM


Your poem is lovely and, perhaps, even more so without considering "Consequences." Maybe there's a way to make 'electric arms' a bit more user friendly. Maybe?  Enjoyed!  
OwlSA
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Durban, South Africa
4 posted 2013-05-07 06:31 PM


Thank you for enjoying my poem, Bob.

Owl

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2013-05-14 09:13 PM


Nice romantic writing...James
jwesley
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Spring, Texas
6 posted 2013-05-14 09:44 PM


wonderful my friend . . . and Bob stole my words... electric made me stumble.

j.

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
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Durban, South Africa
7 posted 2013-05-15 01:33 AM


Thank you for enjoying my poem, Jimmy.  Sorry, Jimmy and Bob, that you both stumbled on "electric", but that is how it is and I ain't gonna change it.

Owl

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
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Durban, South Africa
8 posted 2013-05-15 01:44 AM


Thank you, James.

Owl

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