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Sue_s
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since 2013-03-26
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0 posted 2013-04-10 11:39 AM



Another Life


      For days now I've been dreaming

            four separate days and nights

      Strange for me to dream like this

            you'd think I'd have it right

      The dream never changes

            it's been the same each time..

      Starting with the glow from the fire

            to the way your lips meet mine
      Opening vision is this wall

            A large wall that's made of stone

      located dead in the center

            a raging fire.. nearby I sit.....alone

       I'm dressed in a long white gown

            and there's candles everywhere

      In my hands I hold a paper

            in my eyes...just a blank stare
      There's music somewhere playing

            least I think that's what I hear

      There's a definite rhythm beating

            not just  me....it's everywhere

       Then this knock sounds out loudly

            startling me right to the core

      This chill runs down my body

            as you walk in through the door
      Now this part seems quite silly

            before me you stand in frills      

      You speak to me in tongues of old

            in your hand...a writing quill

      'Neath your arm you carry a journal

            there's a sword strapped to your side

      Though I know not what you're saying

            unmistakable.....the look in your eyes
      Then suddenly....this aroma

            a cross between fruit and spice

      To me it's vaguely familiar

            exciting..both fire and ice

      You hand to me this goblet

            and you stare into my eyes

      As you encourage me to drink

            your face  wet with tears you cried
     You take my face into your hands

            your eyes see to my soul

      With our lips nearly touching

            you whisper soft and low

      But try as I may I can't hear you

            or somehow I  don't understand

      You smile at me with those green eyes

            and point to the page in my hand
      As my eyes focus upon it

            the vision.. sharp as a knife

      There within these same four walls

            stood us in another life..

      Your arms were wrapped around me

            your lips were pressed to mine

      Our bodies were joined together

            but another place....in time
      As I look up from the paper

            suddenly I feel a chill

      As I slowly look around me

            I see a bird..upon the sill

      As he flies off.. a breeze is blowing

            the page is taken from my hand

      And  it flutters into the fire

            and there I am......alone again.



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JerryPat2
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1 posted 2013-04-10 11:45 AM


Interesting concept, Sue, and I liked the drawn-out way you went about putting it all together. The ending was perfecto!

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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2 posted 2013-04-10 03:21 PM


I have to agree with Jerry. Great symbolism and imagery and all that romantic mystery!
Sounded like a teaser for a romantic cable series. Good Stuff!

lori

Daddy Goose38
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since 2010-09-04
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3 posted 2013-04-10 04:20 PM


O, where else but here on pip can I come to know another's passionate and private fantasies and night dreams.
That they would never reveal to me in person.

quiet with Ginny

Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725
California
4 posted 2013-04-10 10:31 PM


I know it's probably just me, and it's really simple, it is, but, my at least partial interpretation would be, you need to write!  Enjoyed!     
Sue_s
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since 2013-03-26
Posts 45

5 posted 2013-04-13 03:55 PM


Thanks folks. Always nice to get a positive response to something I've written.

Sue

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