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Jiminy Cricket |
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Sue_s Junior Member
since 2013-03-26
Posts 45 |
Jiminy Cricket wished on too many stars always a dreamer and too many bars Drank too many whiskeys smoked much too much weed then liked to tell stories and make us believe He said he met Elvis he said they had lunch He spoke of bananas they fried up a bunch He spoke of a big nose Pinocchio he knew Said he hung out with Dumbo Huey, Dewey and Lou Played golf with Peter Pan in the land of the Never Had spinach with Popeye though he said he had better He moonwalked with Michael claims that was a thriller Been flea dipped with Tramp after visiting Old Yeller But the story that got me that he swore was all true Said he won some damn contest Publishers Clearance House threw He said he won a million and a ton of balloons He was waiting for the check sure to be here real soon Foolish me I believed him second mortgaged my home Did it all for my friend and made him a loan Here it is three years later and I haven't been paid Say goodbye to The Cricket For Christmas he's gets RAID. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Haha! Loved the ending. I guess that says a lot about my disposition these days, smiling when I see a liar getting the RAID treatment. Justice has been served. Enjoyed. Michael |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
A very creative story. I enjoyed all the lighthearted imagery and, especially, the cricket taking on unimaginable, until now, human characteristics. Good job.  Maybe, a suggestion might be to change your last line to he's getting RAID or something like that. Maybe. Maybe? |
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Daddy Goose38 Member
since 2010-09-04
Posts 430obama's a rice paper tiger |
Wonderful snapshot of somoen's life. J. quiet with Ginny |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Loved It!! LOL j. |
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Sue_s Junior Member
since 2013-03-26
Posts 45 |
Thank you all for taking the time to read and respond. Just a silly piece I wrote after a few drinks. I appreciate the comments. No matter how it's said Bob, we both agree that the little bas*@rd deserves RAID.. Thanks again. Sue |
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