Open Poetry #48 |
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MorningStar Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290Pittsburgh, Pa ![]() |
Saturdays That's our time our private time I tell myself No more and Never again But I don't mean it I'll come back I always come back I tell myself You're not good for me and I need to give you up So I do until I don't Because I can't anymore I can never stay away for long Such a passionate affair I can't even remember When it began like it's always been I tell myself no more And resolve to stay away but I know After all these years It'll do no good It's been so long too long So... You Me This Saturday The bakery down the street Just like old times ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Every year I give up sweets for Lent, hoping I'll kick the habit. But I'm only fooling myself. So if anyone is looking for me on Saturday... I'll be in the bakery meeting an old love of mine - chocolate. Hello lover!!! ![]() "I'll tell you how the sun rose A ribbon at a time..." - Emily Dickinson [This message has been edited by MorningStar (03-26-2013 11:53 AM).] |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hah! You joker you, you "got" me. I owe you one. Heh.Heh That was cute. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~ |
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MorningStar Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290Pittsburgh, Pa |
JerryPat2, Just talking bout my first love! tee hee hee "I'll tell you how the sun rose |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Sweet stuff! |
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MorningStar Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290Pittsburgh, Pa |
Yes it is indeed! Thanks for stopping by! "I'll tell you how the sun rose |
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Victoria![]()
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Cute one MorningStar...I love chocolate too. A chocolate affair ha... ![]() ~Victoria I was adored once too. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Awesome piece ... and as it stands leaves it to the imagination as to who/what is being talked about. And that's Not a bad thing. The only thing I'd like better is if you incorporate "bakery / Chocolate" into the end of the poem instead of having to add a note for clarity. Still, great write. j. |
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MorningStar Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290Pittsburgh, Pa |
j, Thank you. You know, I really considered having it read: "You Me This Saturday the bakery down the street" But I changed my mind at the last minute. I think I'll change it back... Much appreciated!! "I'll tell you how the sun rose A ribbon at a time..." - Emily Dickinson |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Sent you an email ... j. |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
I like it ... No, I love it ... Chocolate! Yeah, it's my favorite comfort food as well and, yeah, you had me fooled right up until the end. Enjoyed! ![]() |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...I hope its dark chocolate...James |
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