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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2013-03-13 06:24 AM

speeding life, fleeting youth
the imitation of a dream
we take when its time to take
we give when we must give
New Orleans
old cemeteries
tolling church bells
trying to sculpt its mayhem
a not so silent quest
I burned with anger at life
which had chewed me up cruelly
and spat me out
a city like none other
I came to it pale
naked and transparent
it was
my world a la carte
I took a new lover and
the Big Easy was a tramp
she gave me
life as a masquerade
she was never motionless
never defined
she spoke to me
somewhat sinisterly
as the midnight sun boiled and baked
I heard shrieks of slaves
being auctioned off
I walked the streets toward nothingness
false pride
mistrusting everyone
except my constant daydreams
as anonymous dark
silently enshrouded me
I stood
on the edge of the world
innocence lost

©March 3, 2013 / Jerry Pat Bolton

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2013-03-13 08:38 AM

Your words are as haunting as the past and places you write about. You bring the color and scents to life. As always, well done my dear friend.

lori (o:}

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2013-03-13 08:50 AM

. . . and your comments, my friend, always give me a hit of feel good to read. Thank you for showing up this morning.

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Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

3 posted 2013-03-13 09:37 AM

As usual I could keep reading on and on. You really know how to seduce the reader Jerry...Loved your words.

~Victoria

I was adored once too.
William Shakespeare

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2013-03-13 10:05 AM

Thank you, Victoria, for your most kind words.

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MorningStar
Member

since 2009-10-26

Posts 290
Pittsburgh, Pa

5 posted 2013-03-13 11:56 AM

What a picture you paint! I was totally sucked into this one. Beautifully done.

"I'll tell you how the sun rose
A ribbon at a time..." - Emily Dickinson

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2013-03-13 12:06 PM

You have given me the ultimate compliment, MorningStar, when you said, " I was totally sucked into this one." Thank you very much for that . . .

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JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2013-03-14 12:45 PM

Fine writing that I enjoyed reading...James

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

8 posted 2013-03-14 06:58 AM

Thanks for the comment, James.

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Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2013-03-15 09:32 PM

You make me want to revive my times in your world...the way I saw it...naive as ever!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

10 posted 2013-03-15 09:39 PM

Hi, Karilea, thank you for your kind words about "Seduced by New Orleans." I was naive also the first time I hit that town (Senior Trip), but I wasn't for long.

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