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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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searching for a new way to say it bottle is half empty or is that half full all I know is I'm pickled inebriated on habitual my face is wet and it hasn't rained in three weeks without my id feels like a nor'easter shaking what little thinking parts all to hell what was I thinking about oh . . . searching for a new way to say it just figured it out my face is wet because of the tears my eyes are slits searching for that celebrated flash when I finally come up with a better way to . . . you know old reflections seem to sparkle among the dust wherein it lies take another sip (swallow) (gurgle) (gulp) aha! I figured it out there is no better way of saying . . . I love you ©January 23, 2013 / Jerry at Bolton ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
This poem also makes me think of Billy Joels song The Piano Man, making love to his tonic and gin. You describe it well Jerry. Soul searching as your title says. ~Victoria |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Good analysis about Billy Joel and that great song of his, Victoria. Thank you for being here . . . ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Cool way of saying it differently, my friend... well done. j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Good morning, J. Appreciate the kind words. Good to see you back . . . Not that you were gone that long. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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LorienLord Member
since 2013-02-03
Posts 55Wisconsin USA |
That is why we are poets.....always searching for a way to say something "old" in a "new" way, which you have so perfectly expressed in your poem. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks, L.L., for reading my poem and commenting on it. Yes, forever searching for new ways to say it. Again, I appreciate you being here. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Yes, JP the best way to say it, is just to say it. Happy Valentine's Day to you! Enjoyed, Ms. E |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Heh.Heh Thank you so much, Ms. E, and thank you for being here. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~ |
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