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VAS
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0 posted 2013-02-09 11:43 AM


Within an Eternal Bubble?

What may dwell within?
What might this orb provide?
What should one see from without or within?

Should I reside, what might I glean?
Secrets of the universe;
freedom from some horrid curse?

Stars hang in near proximity;
dust and gases hover.
This bubble looks to float and flit.

Yet its stillness overcomes
what gravity or structural collapse
might wreak havoc or condemn.

Its beauty, its eeriness haunts and effervesces;
how might one comprehend
this realm it silently possesses.

From this distant perch
too far away to touch or even dream
in consciousness or slumber, I stare.

The gathering, the starry night
the sparkle and clustered dust
gleam and give a rosy glow.

The magnitude, the density
ethereal or concrete
is ultimately more than I can know.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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Victoria
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1 posted 2013-02-09 01:24 PM



What may dwell within?
What might this orb provide?
What should one see from without or within


Nicely done Virginia...This one really is a challenge...you are the brave one for attempting it.

~Victoria

VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
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Oregon
2 posted 2013-02-09 01:26 PM


my thoughts exactly..it is so unexplainably magnificent.
jwesley
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3 posted 2013-02-09 01:40 PM


I think you did it perfectly, my friend, with the ending stanza tying it all together outstandingly.
j.

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