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Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

0 posted 2013-02-07 11:19 AM

The windswept hair of mother nature
auburn and rustic brown,
dances to the song of bluebirds
as it cha cha's across the town.

Her hair dances within the chestnut breeze
as acorns drop... drop... drop...
and naked branches sway and tease
as burning ashes pop... pop... pop...

Mother natures hair will grow again soon,
during month of the April rain
hair as long as weeping willows,
an emerald crown and lustrous mane.

Rays of sunshine color golden streaks,
in her windswept hair as summertime peaks.

~Victoria

Be not ashamed of mistakes and thus make them crimes.
Confucius

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2013-02-07 12:45 PM

I don't know if this can be called a sonnet because the first and third of each stanza doesn't rhyme, Victoria. Whatever it is called, I call it self-fulfilling and prophetic, as the windswept hair of the earth will, as the poem so expertly said, will return in its former glory . . .

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

2 posted 2013-02-07 01:13 PM

Yes its crowning glory, maybe I should have said that instead of emerald crown...Yes its a sonnet as long as the second and fourth line rhymes...I usually dont go with AABB. I like ABAB OR ABCB. I appreciate your kind comments as always dear Jerry.

~Victoria

Be not ashamed of mistakes and thus make them crimes.
Confucius

OLIAS
Senior Member

since 2000-06-20

Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa

3 posted 2013-02-08 06:22 AM

Nice sonnet, with some cha cha rhythm, much enjoyed.

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

4 posted 2013-02-08 12:24 PM

Thank you Olias..glad you enjoyed the cha cha of the day.

~Victoria

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2013-02-08 05:47 PM

Really beautiful!! So many great visuals to behold.

Very nice writing V~

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

6 posted 2013-02-08 06:50 PM

Thank you Lori,hope all is well with you. Nice to hear from you as always.

~Victoria

Be not ashamed of mistakes and thus make them crimes.
Confucius

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2013-02-09 09:08 PM

Enjoyed...James

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

8 posted 2013-02-09 09:21 PM

Thanks James...nice to see you.

Victoria

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