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ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

0 posted 2013-01-09 09:10 PM

Watermark~

Pale to the background against still warming embers
Still warm hand prints drawn alas and due remembers
Due within the chorus of the winter warbles song
Winter turns a pale cheek and moves the mood along

Thirst, in but a trickle, dew cups trail and trough
Trail along the footpaths once spring has had enough
Spring again the warming, again the pale of day
Pale the skin of winter, as the chill sends dawn away

Silence of the snowfall, still dusting branch and rail
Rail of oak and spruce tree stores of high set tail
Tail and tuft of ardor, the scent now thin and sheer
Sheer my outline somber, in pale peace revere

Pale in blue and auburn, the colors of my soul
Colors cast of smoke and sigh fondly on the dole
Fondly is the silence of a thousand memories
Winter turns a pale cheek, a kiss upon the breeze

Copyright Kkh 1/9/13

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2013-01-09 09:25 PM

Your title is so perfect!

Gorgeous as ever!

Really nice to read you again, TD~

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

2 posted 2013-01-09 09:36 PM

This is beautiful and I like the way you used a word from the sentence above to create another sentence. That was great. Is there a term for that? or is it something you created yourself? I will have to try it. Enjoyed.

~Victoria

Love is a smoke made with the fume of sighs.
William Shakespeare

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

3 posted 2013-01-09 10:19 PM

And a beautiful "Watermark" this is.

Loved this verse best, very calming:

"Silence of the snowfall, still dusting branch and rail
Rail of oak and spruce tree stores of high set tail
Tail and tuft of ardor, the scent now thin and sheer
Sheer my outline somber, in pale peace revere"

JL

PS Good to see you again!!

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

4 posted 2013-01-09 10:27 PM

Haven't seen you in a while ... sure glad I did tonight though. Your touch is evident.
Enjoyed.

j.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

5 posted 2013-01-09 10:40 PM

Thanks so much folks. I've missed you all and writing. Happy to be back again.
TD

Goldenrose
Member Elite

since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

6 posted 2013-01-10 09:51 AM

Quite excusite,reads like DeLamare,beautful,moving and peaceful. Really enjoyed reading.
Thank you for sharing.

Goldenrose.

music was my refuge.i could crawl into the spaces between the notes and curl my back to loneliness - Maya Angelou

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

7 posted 2013-01-10 02:32 PM

Lovely, TD! I especially liked the last two lines.

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

8 posted 2013-01-10 04:13 PM

I liked this one alot.

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

9 posted 2013-01-12 12:04 PM

So glad to see you here again. Lovely poem.
Ida

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

10 posted 2013-01-13 02:33 PM

sheer beauty
against a background
of the ebb and flow
that survives and includes us
in this timeless trance

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

11 posted 2013-01-14 11:32 PM

oh my gawd such art this is..

i started out only being able to write in rhyme.. now i write in a more freestyle form just as easily..

the rhyme is the true classic.. if even not structured rhyme, its the flow and melody that distinguishes poetry from prose..

which is what most people write on websites such as this one, including me, which is absolutely wonderful, and of course thats just my own opinion, not anyone elses..

but this my friend is the real deal..

and its this timeless style of your's that has always made me respect your talent so immensely..

this was a wonder, and much more..

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

12 posted 2013-01-15 07:19 AM

I humbly thank you for the kind words. So much inspiration here on the blue.
Best Regards,
TD

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