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brian thomas madden
Junior Member

since 2010-07-08

Posts 32
Ireland (between an ocean and a rock)

0 posted 2012-08-10 06:16 PM

I finally got to show this poem to the person it was intended for, my muse hopefully you will help me find my voice again.

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Thread the tangled waves
of your midnight curls,
where tender dreams are netted
and shaken free, as my trembling
fingertips trace a path of scars
to the cradle of your breast.
Beneath the rise of flesh your heart
echoes in my palm and I submit
to kneel in silent petition
while laurel leaves adorn your feet.

For a decade I was adrift
as a vagrant upon anarchic seas,
now I yearn to dwell
in the hollows of your chest,
to weave an olive branch aviary
and perch among your murmurs of desire.
I'd lay siege to your garden of slumber
so I may wake clutched in your embrace
for a final chance at an eternal dawn.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-08-10 06:25 PM

I think your voice and your Muse have conspired to give you back that voice you've been looking for. Nice work.

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

2 posted 2012-08-10 09:31 PM

WOW!! filled with tender passion...thank you for posting it...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

3 posted 2012-08-10 10:52 PM

This is very, very beautiful.
Ms. E

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

4 posted 2012-08-11 12:54 PM

A beautiful sentiment, one I feel strongly... And so happy to have read it even if I'm two years late. You've always inspired me.... I am thankful for having inspired you xx

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2012-08-11 07:23 AM

Absolutely captivating and inspiring. The muse is definitely back I would say ...

Margherita

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

6 posted 2012-08-12 11:18 AM

I get a sense of well being and coming full circle.

Your poem is a passionate one and made me step back and take a good look at love and forgiveness.

...and to appreciate every preacious moment in life, and learn from them.

A pleasure to read~

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

7 posted 2012-08-13 04:13 PM

"so I may wake clutched in your embrace
for a final chance at an eternal dawn."

Excellent write!!
JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2012-08-16 10:18 PM

Nice...nice...nice...James

brian thomas madden
Junior Member

since 2010-07-08

Posts 32
Ireland (between an ocean and a rock)

9 posted 2012-08-24 12:51 PM

JerryPat2, Startime1955, ebonygirl, Margherita, BluesSerenade, JL and James thank you for reading and for the kind words.

Dawn, thank you for brightening a recent deary autumn's day, for inspiring me in so many ways, for being my muse and for bring me back here xxx

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