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Sometimes I lay awake at night
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Sometimes I lay awake at night |
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Nigelinoz Member
since 2012-07-24
Posts 71Victoria,Australia |
A bit long,and rambling,but from the heart. Sometimes I lay awake at night Wishing ,wishing with all my might Wishing ,wishing upon a star Wishing ,wishing that you weren't so far So far,so far,so far away Far from the lonely bed where I lay. Far away from this lovers nest Far away from my naked chest Far away from my arm so strong Far away from my plaintive song A plaintive song that I sing to you To tell you of my love so true A plaintive cry,softly in the night A wish ,a wish,that I could hold you tight Hold you tight,hold you tight,tight to my heart So you know that we will never part. But I look to the side And you're not there You're place in the bed is cold and alone And you aren't there,I'm all on my own On my own,on my own,on my own once again On my own,laying ,trying to deal with the pain Deal with the pain of wishing,and hoping,that my wish will come true. That someday I will lay -asleep next to you. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I really like this... and identify with it so very much!  And it's because I do like it so much that I ask if you meant "plaintive" (mournful, expressing sorrow) rather than plaintiff? Welcome to Passions! |
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Nigelinoz Member
since 2012-07-24
Posts 71Victoria,Australia |
Thank you suthern for your lovely comment and yes I did mean plaintive,I appreciate very much you helping me improve my writing by pointing out that grammatical error,it was a silly mistake to make. Again thank you so much for your help and comments. Cheers N'oz |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I think you're still within the window of time we're given to make edits... should you choose to do so. I look forward to reading more of your work!! |
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Nigelinoz Member
since 2012-07-24
Posts 71Victoria,Australia |
Done and dusted. Thanks again suthern and I will be looking out for examples of your work too. Thanks for being so kind. Cheers N'oz |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
It is easy to tell this poem is from the heart...I am wishing on a star for you that the two of you will find a way to bring true love together...*BIG HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
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Nigelinoz Member
since 2012-07-24
Posts 71Victoria,Australia |
Oh Thank You startime1955, Your comments are very much appreciated.I'm only a new poet but I do try to let my heart do the writing,I hope my poems will become even better as I gain my experience along with the help and advice from people here. I will look for some of your work too. Thanks again for making me so welcome. Cheers N'oz |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...I suppose the question to be ask, is the other person thinking likewise because then and only then will somthing good happen...James |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Enjoying your poetry. Ms. E |
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