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Open Poetry #48

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Alicat
Member Elite

since 1999-05-23

Posts 4094
Coastal Texas

0 posted 2013-08-09 08:20 PM

I remember thinking, sitting in your car,
neither of us could get very far,
not while you're tethered to me
can you make dreams reality.

There's no space for that simple thing:
the gentle spreading of your wings.
No room to fly free
not while you cling to me.

And so it comes to this:
my promises I twist
to create this lie,
"It's my fault." the alibi.

You must be spirit free
and fly away from me;
only when you take flight
can you give your dreams life.

And I remember thinking, sitting in your car,
neither of us could get very far,
not while you're tethered to me
can you make dreams reality.

Alicat
08/09/13

*inspired by Tracy Chapman's 'Fast Car'

swampguy
Member

since 2013-08-04

Posts 83

1 posted 2013-08-09 10:14 PM

Sounds like you were wanting her to spread her wings, and fly, far, far away and let you do your thing. That was way I got through the word of this one, my friend. I know we're not friends, but . . .

~*~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~*~

Alicat
Member Elite

since 1999-05-23

Posts 4094
Coastal Texas

2 posted 2013-08-12 06:25 PM

Thanks for the read, swampguy, and no worries. This ones doesn't often do cathartic, choosing to write from waking and asleep dreams, once remembered.

The tone was assumed guilt at hindering a loved one's growth, real or imagined.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2013-08-24 10:12 PM

enjoyed...James

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