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The Angel Said . . .
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The Angel Said . . . |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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 an angel came to me just dropped down from Heaven one cheerless, lonely night I was sitting on the sofa it was a night like the ones before and the ones I assumed would come void of the flair for life reliving my past not such a positive thing to do the angel appeared and said I think I can help I believed I was finally having that acid flashback like they said I would so I said "huh?" angel smiled a radiant smile of course he did, he was, after all, an angel I can remake your sorry life fix things make you a good guy instead of the creep you are well, hell, hallucinating or not I'm going for that deal so I said "you're on, pal, let'er rip and so he spread his arms wide I was jerked from the sofa into . . . the past jeez that angel, he oh I forgot he looked like Mickey Rourke he began to heal old scars covered up moral stains as I watched, mouth agape it was as though he was a lifetime redecorator ain't that something I watched in amazement what that angel did bad things I got caught doing as a kid smoothed them right up nothing to it finished with the kid stuff turned and looked at me ah, here comes the interesting things I looked at myself in my twenties now Marionette was there she was so pretty "wait," I said, "don't mess with her" angel looked disappointed shrugged, a feather or two fell from his wings said that's cool, you've lots more bad stuff to cover up whew, I was thinking, that was close then into view came Nanette sitting by the pool Crystal Apartments, Los Angeles, 1965 "no-o-o" I screamed "not her, don't do it" have you ever seen an angel go into a full-fledged snit it's not funny let me tell you but that's what he did "go away," I said, "leave me alone" but there's more bad you have to atone "I know, I know, just leave it alone" he left so abruptly his feathers momentarily caught on fire I went to the window opened it, took a deep breath of air if the angel had absolved my sins to Marionette and Nanette my goodness there would be no Paula, Patricia or Nick I sat back on the sofa laughing thinking I'd dreamed it all until a large feather somewhat singed, landed on my nose ©Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
An interesting take on wiping the slate clean and at what cost. Love the ending my friend Lori  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yeah, at what cost indeed, Lori. Thanks about the ending. I looked for a singed feather for a photo, but was unable to find one. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Understood, JP, understood. Thank you for writing this poem, this day. ms. e |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, ms. e, and if it helped a situation of yours in any small way, I am grateful. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
WOW!!! Stunning...I love this poem...there is very little in my own past I would change because without everthing I would not be who I am today...I totally understand...*HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Karen, and how very right you are. When we entertain thoughts about being able to change our past we don't take into consideration that if we change our past we change things with other people, but most importantly we change who we are. Appreciate your thoughts. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Oh I think you just took a big bite out of your pillow and spit that feather up into the air......LOL Seriously, the story in the verses really held me and I understand what you're writing here. Some things are just what they are. Really enjoyed this Jerry Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Sssh. I didn't want anyone to know about the pillow, Eric. Yep, you're correct in your analysis, and thanks for dropping by. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Just wanted you and Ethome to know I almost fell off my chair laughing at your comments. Made my day. Ms. E |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Any time Eric and I can make your day, we (speaking for Eric also) feel that it has been a good day for us. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful...very creative...James |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, James, I appreciate it. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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