Open Poetry #48 |
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Green, Green Grass |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams ![]() |
Green, Green Grass Softness beneath my feet, And sweet smells in the wind- All so unnatural Juju -Juju |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Haha! Threw us a curve ball,didn't ya, Juju? Expecting pleasant words to describe the pleasant scene, but I quite understand your logic in calling it unnatural. Good choice of words. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I have a dark sense of humor... It may not be healthy. Juju -Juju |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
It's healthy, just in a weird way. I'm pretty much there with you. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I'm so sorry to hear that while walking through that green grass you walked into a cowpie.... Probably in your bare feet too, ah well, the world loves the sweet smells of a farm girl..... Don't mind me I'm a self declared nutcase, I disarm a lot of people that way. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
LOL!!! I'm still laughing at what Eric said...sometimes our soul needs a little dark to balance us...*HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
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Ringo![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
It has been far too long since I have read your words... it will not be this long again. I truly enjoyed this Life's journey is not to arrive at the grave safely in a well preserved body, but rather to skid in sideways, totally worn out, shouting, "WHAT A RIDE |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
it seems the world is so unatural , sometimes we take consciouness ot it and it can be amazing, such powerful is your poem, yann |
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Zall Member
since 2002-08-25
Posts 214London, England |
Lol.. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
wore this one on my leather when I stopped to place a cigar on the grave of a widow. enjoyed it jbomb |
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Ron63 Junior Member
since 2012-03-18
Posts 49Suffolk, Eng, UK |
If this isn't an hiaku, it seems to read like one that creates the potential for many interpretations. I read this poem yesterday and loved its brevity but wasn't sure how to comment, except to say 'I liked it very much'. I had to return again today for another read and still feel puzzled about the last line, which is why I like it, it causes the mind to think deeply about what you have written. If this forum had a points system your poem would be close 10 points. Nice one. |
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