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Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

0 posted 2012-05-17 12:37 PM

Regret

Amidst the country air
Trains that pass here and there
You made me feel despair

I was caught in your snare:
Harsh words I could not bare
Tangled with tender care

My heart, you didn't spare
With your soft country flair
and your dark stone cold stare

I had dreamed of somewhere,
Something I could compare
To this endless nightmare

But in the end I did love you
and I was left ever your due

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

1 posted 2012-05-17 01:38 AM

so well expressed, pain don't go easy and regrets occupy our lives with some obscurancy (for myself it has been a very long time, a lost time), thanks juju for the touching and delicate poem,

yann

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-05-17 05:46 AM

Ah, old story with a fresh outlook from your intriguing pen. What looks so promising in the beginning all too often becomes that nightmare you spoke of. Painful write.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2012-05-17 06:48 AM

"I was caught in your snare:
Harsh words I could not bare
Tangled with tender care"

sounds all too familiar, Juju.

Hope you are doing well, it is nice to see you here.

M

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

4 posted 2012-05-17 09:30 AM

I felt your pain because I have been there...*sigh* so sad that something so beautiful can become such a nightmare...a very heartfelt poem...*HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2012-05-18 02:10 AM

Nice writing...James

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2012-05-19 05:21 AM

Excellent writing.
Love the flow from loving emotion to frustrated and sad emotion.

"Harsh words I could not bare
Tangled with tender care"

Love those lines, makes me think of some of the meaning to Sade's "Smooth Operator."

You know, you look a bit like Tori Amos.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

[This message has been edited by ethome (05-19-2012 08:01 AM).]

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