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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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0 posted 2010-12-21 11:33 AM


Heartsleeve went to the River
wearing her favorite haydite shoes
She sat down on the bank
In the pouring rain
Watching the river rise
LGRĀ©12/21/10

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JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30
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1 posted 2010-12-21 12:07 PM


VERY well done.

That is called taking the slow way out.

(Psst! Had to look up haydite.)

http://swamprighter.wordpress.com/

[This message has been edited by JerryPat (12-21-2010 12:56 PM).]

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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2 posted 2010-12-21 12:24 PM


Jerry, I had to look it up too to see how to spell it.  Glad you liked it
Lori

easy1
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since 2010-05-22
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3 posted 2010-12-21 01:45 PM


Clever. That's an interesting technique, hiding in plain sight. It's rarely used so one tends to remember the instances.
Sunshine
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4 posted 2010-12-21 08:57 PM


You've capitalized "river"
and it makes it sound like
Jordan coming after you...

I'm impressed. You left a lot
of imagery to fill the mind.


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