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Open Poetry #46

Haydite Shoes

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2010-12-21 11:33 AM

Heartsleeve went to the River
wearing her favorite haydite shoes
She sat down on the bank
In the pouring rain
Watching the river rise
LGR©12/21/10

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

1 posted 2010-12-21 12:07 PM

VERY well done.

That is called taking the slow way out.

(Psst! Had to look up haydite.)

http://swamprighter.wordpress.com/

[This message has been edited by JerryPat (12-21-2010 12:56 PM).]

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2010-12-21 12:24 PM

Jerry, I had to look it up too to see how to spell it. Glad you liked it

Lori

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

3 posted 2010-12-21 01:45 PM

Clever. That's an interesting technique, hiding in plain sight. It's rarely used so one tends to remember the instances.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2010-12-21 08:57 PM

You've capitalized "river"
and it makes it sound like
Jordan coming after you...

I'm impressed. You left a lot
of imagery to fill the mind.

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