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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2010-12-08 01:37 PM

I won’t remember the air;
it's a featureless entity
silently hanging like a prayer
when it's not disturbing my hair.

It's the keeper of pure energy
that neither can hold my hand
nor walk me to paradise
one beautiful step at a time.

There are no separate parts
like love/love me not petals
on flowers prepared to be stripped
down to the essential core.

And though I stare like one enthralled
I don't see the face of the one I adore
nor the witch and the wizard of magic
dressed and adorned as I once was.

It's air, only air, featureless air,
with a punch that keeps me aware
when I breathe and again breathe in
what it decides is befitting for me.

And so of the air, that featureless air,
I sacrificed so much to feel
it really is now and forever will be
a great disappointment to me!

Helen / 8 December 2010
(Don’t ask me - I’m just the writer)

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2010-12-08 02:00 PM

ok I won't ask...I'll tell...I like poems that make me look at things in a way I hadn't before. This is one of those. Enjoyed
Lori

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2010-12-08 02:09 PM

Thanks, Lori!

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

3 posted 2010-12-08 03:06 PM

Take a deep breath. Good. Now. Take another deep breath. That's air. You can't do that with water. Air is our friend.

Just having fun, Helen, actually I liked your dissection of the invisible (except in Los Angeles) air.

http://swampwriter.blogspot.com/

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

4 posted 2010-12-08 03:14 PM

Thanks, Jerry. I reckon we can blame most things on the air - better than blaming ourselves I guess.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

5 posted 2010-12-24 02:42 PM

I won't ask. I'll simply breathe in your words.

Alison

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2010-12-25 03:55 AM

Peculiar isn't it how that featureless air keeps one going all the same.
I know you need a fresh breath of love filled air.
Then I can see you skipping and running all the way to the South African Atlantic jumping up into the featureless air clicking your heels together shouting, "c'mon honey try and catch me! I'll treat you nice if you can!"

Take care Helen

I really enjoyed reading this, it's filled with lots of ambiguity.

Eric

ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call
and kinda driftin away from it all

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

7 posted 2010-12-25 04:47 AM

Air is a need, like potable water.
Spirit is Spirit, and matter is matter.

Prats
Member

since 2010-12-16

Posts 74

8 posted 2010-12-25 07:24 AM

lovely poem... enjoyed...

When life gives you a hundred reasons to cry, show life that you have a thousand reasons to smile... :D

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