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An Impatient Child
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An Impatient Child |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere 
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I demanding constantly curious of whims and fancy I dress up in mother's clothes and dance a parody 'round reality I slip out of shoes that never really fit and wiggle bare toes in the muck A playground sky scattered with clouds toys for my imagination Sweet breezes caress tender noddings from the trees they bounce shadows on a lonely wall making faces making friends out of thin air and silence LGR(c)1994 |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Some children lead lonely lives even among family and friends. The mind is a strange and wonderful thing, but it can play horrible tricks on you at times. Nice work. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Thanks for the read Jerry. Lori |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
quote: At times, those friends made of air and silence- are what we need. Enjoyed. -Trina. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Thanks Trina means alot coming from you. Lori |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
touching piece here enjoyed |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Very evocative... it captures the vibrant imaginative world children live in... too bad we lose a great part of it, as adults. Very well-written, here  Amaryllis A pile of scribbles here: |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Touching piece indeed, can very much relate to it. Have been there as a child. Fine writing, Lori. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Lori - Having just written about "air" if I ever made "friends out of thin air" then they've long since gone. But, yes, you describe the world of a child very well. Enjoyed! Helen |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
passing shadows- thank you very much! ____________________________________ Thanks for your kind words Amaryllis _____________________________________ Prasad Nataraj-Thank you much _____________________________________ Thanks for the compliment Helen Lori |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...and it's OLD!!! Love this one! |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
If the poem is old what does that make me ancient? (lol)Thank you  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Lori...I think you wrote this with sensitive thought to the child. She is familiar to me. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
loved this.Reminded of my young daughter and her friend.I heard them arguing in the yard about who was going to carry the "pink poketbook".I peeked out he door and sugessted they take turns and share it.I did not even see the pink pocket book. That is when I learned it was an imaginary pink pocketbook they were quarreling over. LOL latearrival |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Martie- thanks for checking me out. This was a lot of me as a child. _________________________________________ latearrival-glad you can relate, thanks! Lori |
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