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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2010-11-29 09:25 PM



It was in the inconsistency--
imprecisioned by gapped teeth
that I heard the slithering
the tune of F sharp's gathering
cresting as conducted by
baton, from a cat's claw;
a mouse sat properly and pawed
notes in whole on the harp string.

I saw the roads mapped over streams;
bridges built absurdly large,
shadowed their complexities
across one slow complacent barge
pushing corn back to the farms
so empty of the boast of yield.

Now would be the time for those
who bear the weight of grudge on me--
I'm open, wounded, and I grieve.
I beg you, take your shot at me
now, while I am numb.


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JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991
Louisiana/America
1 posted 2010-11-29 09:41 PM


Damn. What a mishmash, or rather a hodgepodge of situations you give to decipher. All this and the background music (in the key of F sharp) provided by a proper mouse as he mastered the harp. I can absolutely see that image.

As the music is played the mind seeks out strange sights and overly built structures as the small in us are wont to over-dramatize. The last verse is a time for courage and weathering of what life throws your way.

Last line is a killer.


. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

easy1
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since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209
Southeastern USA
2 posted 2010-12-01 03:57 PM


Interesting, a worthy read... I have been to orchestral concerts I believe under somewhat similar circumstances.
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