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First Snow
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First Snow |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now 
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Not a bitter, sleeting bite, today- but the subtle fall of eiderdown slow, in lazy gatherings of white- dizzy on November`s final crown. Listen, where the quiet hollows sleep- when the slushy flakes anoint the earth, hear the kiss they give before they die, watch the swirling eddies of their birth. From the window, hemlock-framed, and warm- heavy cedar boughs bend patient, by dusted Douglas fir, and hide the wren soon to sing her shivering goodbye. . . . |
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2gabby Junior Member
since 2010-11-21
Posts 23 |
love this beautiful imagery and melancholy tone. lovely poem. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Ah, you paint a wonderful early snowfall picture, Amaryllis. I love snow, but it hardly ever snows down here. There is something about it falling so quietly, with it swirls and updrafts. Yes, it is beautiful to watch even if it is just falling straight down. Your words put me there. Thank you. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you, gabby~~  . And thanks, too, Jerry... I wanted to write what I was seeing out my window today, of course... and in truth the flakes were sometimes so huge you could hear them hit the ground~! O.o Anyhow, somehow it came out in iambic meter and rhyme...unusual, for me, but it`s fun.  Thanks for the comment! Best~ A |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, it may be unusual for you but your iambic here is absolute perfection! Wunnerrul, wunnerful, wunnerful... |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
I live on an island in the pacific ocean, so I've never seen snow  But when I do experience a "first snow" I hope it how you've described it - Beautiful.  Enjoyed.-Trina. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Michael, thank you muchly, my friend! Trina, thanks, and I`ve never been to the islands... =( how `bout we trade for a week? I could use some sunshine right about now...! My best~ Amaryllis |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Ohhhh, truly a delight to read and to experience, your first snow, thanks to the masterful description. Love, Margherita |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
True delight, tropicans dreams I should say. Never experienced snow, however read many of Frost’s works on them. Fine writing, Amaryllis.  "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh dear! How lovely this is! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Ah, you captured the peace of it all very well. Bravo! Eric |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
You painted a post card! With sounds and everything. I could practically smell the trees. Loved it! ebm |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thanks to everyone! It means a lot, as it`s always helpful to know if the poem `works`...much appreciated, all~! My best~ A |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ours was last Thursday...fat, wet flakes of beauty...only to melt upon landing. We're told it's going to be a dry winter... but we live in Kansas...and we've learned to lean into the minutes carefully.  |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thanks, Karilea... I do enjoy how pretty it is, just in time for turkey day! I wouldn`t want to live in Kansas or neighboring states... I fear the tornado so much. =( Had enough of them even back when I lived in Mi! ~A |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
Some lovely collocations bring winter to Osaka, Japan, where we don`t get much snow. Ah....to have slushy flakes that annoint the earth would be a treat. Thanks for a winter picture. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
slow, in lazy gatherings of white- dizzy on November`s final crown. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Oh what a beauty this is, breathtaking and a sight to behold. I Just love reading you, A~ You have a very special gift. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you so much, Earl Brinkman, and you too, Bluesy! I appreciate your kind comments so much. My best~ Amaryllis A pile of scribbles here: |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I live in So. Cal. so I haven't seen snow for a while. This makes me remember how beautiful it can be. Ida |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Loved this!! Just beautiful, sounds like you were discribing Maine. Kat >^..^< |
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Novus_Os Member
since 2010-07-21
Posts 115West Coast, USA |
That is a great poem.You describe November as like a heavy weight champ is succumbing to the knockout just drifting away...It definitely puts me right there, by the window. The cold outside, the wind howling. The warmth, and comfort, of inside. The melancholy of the passing moment. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you very much, Ida, Kat, and Novus! I appreciate that so much Best~ Amaryllis |
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