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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2010-11-25 12:32 PM

It pains me still to know
that the ghost behind your eyes
and the phantom in your smile
is the maker and the breaker
of a woman's inner feel.

And it's not as if it needed
machine guns, laser beams,
to open up the channel
for love to walk on out
but simply let you be
a free-will human being.

How strong this ghost and phantom
and how determined in intent
to stay as one subservient
to mortal flesh and bone.

And in the fullness of all time
empathetic niceties
and understanding murmurings
will be as hidden treasure
unmarked with a cross ..

but of you in your mortality
I can love you till I die
because once upon a time
you had the eyes and the smile
of a ghost that tried to come alive!

Helen / 25 November 2010

Bastet
Member

since 2010-05-07

Posts 246

1 posted 2010-11-25 12:41 PM

"the ghost behind your eyes...the phantom in your smile.." interesting and original metaphors. I have know this in people. Your poem brings me in touch with something I have never really put into words. Great writing.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2010-11-25 03:04 PM

Thank you, Bastet. Maybe it all boils down to the fact that we really aren't who we think we are - we're just ghosts!

Helen

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

3 posted 2010-11-25 08:23 PM

Helen, I believe most of us walk around with the ghost and phantom complex (for want of a better word. it's been a long day). Very few people actually shows the world their complete inner self, which is the real you. Well, some do and the mental hospitals are crammed with them. Most of us can handle the ghost and phantom. We have perfected monumental deceit.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

4 posted 2010-11-25 11:58 PM

Thanks, Jerry. "monumental deceit" - how right you are and now why does that bring tears to my eyes?

Andrew Scott
Member Elite

since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

5 posted 2010-11-26 07:28 PM

Once more, I am in awe of your ability to write with such feeling and insite. It is always worth the read. I bow to you and yours. Peace.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

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