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2gabby Junior Member
since 2010-11-21
Posts 23 |
Morning I wake and open my lids Stirred by the song of a finch I look through my window, past trees and a river Relishing in every inch Trees are ablaze with hues of fall Rippling waters lick the shore Critters scurry here and there My, oh, my the stuff of lore Mesmerized, I turn my eyes Glancing at the clock Time has flown and I must rise To comb my hair and fasten my frock I leave the house Walk to school Read my books Attend a class I take some notes Pack my things Ready to retire at last Soon I arrive home and consider my day As I slice and butter a roll And recall that I’ve gone about all of my business Without speaking to a soul Tonight when I look through my window again Staring back is a landscape so bare My sorrows transform this once-magical view With which I have no one to share [This message has been edited by 2gabby (11-22-2010 08:53 PM).] |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
ouch. That last lonely line gets you. Welll done. Enjoyed ebm |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Another excellent write. Hard to believe you haven't been doing this for a while. Loneliness can certainly suck, but there have been times when it was nice to not just talk to anybody. To walk through the day and let the world do the talking. Hope the view improves in time. Peace. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
WoW! The passionate one in and about everything. Such energy. Such . . . oh . . . drat . . . loneliness. VERY good. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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2gabby Junior Member
since 2010-11-21
Posts 23 |
thanks, all. the kind words mean a lot! |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
You have found a wonderful place to share your thoughts now. Keep writing. Fine writing.  "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
You are not alone as long as you travel this blue road. You are so welcome here and here you will see~~ people do care. jo |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
You have written a moving piece that touchs the soul. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Gabby, For a new member, you are doing all of the right things. Getting to know us by reading and responding...and then sharing. Blessings on you, and may you know a warm and heartfelt Thanksgiving.  |
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