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gdcod3player Member
since 2009-09-13
Posts 70California |
The heart you broke is lying all over the floor Makes me wish you didnt destroy our relationship My life has been erased Let me write it in pen again All i had was you You have no idea how you make me feel Let me drag this out until my soul is ripped open wide I have no one, and you let me go Could you sense that i was losing control? I thought you were stronger than me You proved you weren't independent when you slammed that door All these questions keep my heart alone The phone calls that never went through hurt all night I know you've been broken The ghost i play in your life is now going away Disappearing will leave you all alone |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
I like this but I feel that this could be so much more. Use more metaphor and I think this could be even better then it already its. |
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2gabby Junior Member
since 2010-11-21
Posts 23 |
touching, i can feel your heartbreak. |
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