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The Long Goodbye
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The Long Goodbye |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now 
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Oh how she wanted him to write her into a corner, he, who knew the secret language of language, that elision of intensity that campaign of metaphor where thrust and parry each were fold and pressure to delight in every juicing bite of intellect`s sweet and tangy marrow yearned to be put in her place by a curling word or whetted letter sharp as the scythe and trimming where she grew much too full and wild where neglected arched with dull frustration at the attempt to dance against the walls of those whose milling stones stilled or polished gentle where she pressed |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
I thought this was wonderful! Oh how she wanted him to write her into a corner, he, who knew the secret language of language, that elision of intensity that campaign of metaphor where thrust and parry each were fold and pressure to delight in every juicing bite of intellect`s sweet and tangy marrow Lovin' it  write on! |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank ye, Eusta~!  My best~ Amaryllis |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
can see her in cellophane enjoying the nudity but hating the confinement..kewl stuff ms |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thanks, Mr. D  My best~ Amaryllis |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Holy similes and paragraph breaks. Whadda compilation of beautiful words and a millstone to boot. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Lol Jerry! I always like your replies! Thanks~Best~ Amaryllis |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Captivating lines and style, Amaryllis. Write on.  "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
yearned to be put in her place by a curling word or whetted letter sharp as the scythe and trimming where she grew much too full and wild Oh, man! How do you come up with phrases like that?? You continue to amaze, miss  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Wow, dear Amaryllis, how passionately your pen dances here ... for a long goodbye that does not want to ever be, deep down where heartbeats signal emotions. Fantastic write. Love, Margherita |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow! This is a sensuous seductive compilation of metaphors full of ambiguous innuendo. HOT STUFF!! Eric |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You do indeed know the secret language, your poem just drives the point home. Very beautiful A~ and ever so passionately penned!! |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Aw, heh... thank you guys so much~! My best~ Amaryllis |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
I almost let this gem of a poem slip by me. What a wonderful treat of metaphors. |
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