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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

0 posted 2010-11-15 12:31 PM

Denial.
I can't break through
    your walls;
Really, I can't help
    you move on.
Everything you know
can't be erased;
even if I try,
and try;
even If I pleaded,
if I begged.
I can't fix
a heart that
  can't
  feel
   its
  broken.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

Andrew Scott
Member Elite

since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

1 posted 2010-11-15 12:52 PM

Great lines there at the end.
"...I can't fix a heart that
can't feel its broken."
Solid stuff.
Peace.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Eusta B. Mae
Senior Member

since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

2 posted 2010-11-15 08:22 AM

You tell so well the truth about denial in your own special way. Way cool! ebm

Prasad Nataraj
Senior Member

since 2008-05-29

Posts 1149
Bangalore,India

3 posted 2010-11-15 08:56 AM

Very true write this.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

4 posted 2010-11-15 12:36 PM

Good to see you again, I like your style of poetry. Honest I suppose I would say. Like this one. You say much with a minimum of words and the way the words are spread out helps the readers feel they are "getting" there and when they do it is worth the read. Always.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

5 posted 2010-11-15 06:23 PM

Andrew, Mae, Prasad, Jerry-
Thanx for looking in. Appreciate it.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

Earl Brinkman
Senior Member

since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

6 posted 2010-11-16 09:13 AM

What a terrific way to end a poem. Great lines.

MorningStar
Member

since 2009-10-26

Posts 290
Pittsburgh, Pa

7 posted 2010-11-18 01:13 PM

Oh wow. Really great piece. Really.

Aenea

If I don't say it...who will?

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

8 posted 2010-11-18 05:53 PM

Great in between the lines circle of frustrated love.

superb!

Eric

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

9 posted 2010-11-21 11:30 PM

Earl, Aenea, Eric - Thanks for looking in. Appreciate it.

-Trina.

"A heart that can't feel its broken- can't heal."

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