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shudder song blue
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shudder song blue |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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somewhere out of the blue perhaps like the shadow of a church touching where sinners slow dance their afternoons making that heathen healing afterwards with the undulations of skin bending skin around each others fingers....printless but her buttons knew they were pushed again making her go back up much more slowly then when she had hurried to go down and he knew her heartbeat musical sounds better than tattoos that went to the bone and the shimmer of her black car religion always double parked, but with her lights on _____________ daark |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
always with the headlight on.. (smiling) heady stuff Sir, sensual, descriptive and always a wellspring of word play... truly enjoy your art |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Like this one, Dark  It`s always something new, with you.. ~A |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
cpat, thanks guy ________________ ms a'mary, thanks lady for the eyes |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
You nailed this one, especially the last two lines. Good. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks JP.. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Double parking on a slippery slope is kind of dangerous. guess it's the thrill of it all, or something. Nice poem, DS~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
babyblue...a little danger is what keeps us alive is it not? thanks babe |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
"making her go back up much more slowly then when she had hurried to go down and he knew her heartbeat musical sounds better than tattoos that went to the bone" You capture something for me here...loved it!!! ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks ms king |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
D Once again, I hafta say ... I like your style. Ali-san |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Your descriptions are always intriguing- never definite. so the reader can make of it what they will. Not everyone can leave their writing open like that. Enjoyed this. -Trina. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san, thanks little one ______________ ms sinz, thanks lady, I appreciate your reads |
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