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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2010-11-08 11:32 AM


the maple leaves are tattoos again
brown and gold and some red ones
still alive kind of ink they seem
moving around on friendly ground

there is distance in your voice now
as you reach from tree limbs down
playing god or perhaps godless again
flirting is the nature of your nature

I never did mind the arms length touch
kind of like your rings in the ashtray
with some individual trident protection
so your mouth wouldn't be dry sounding

when you smiled accidentally for my eyes
and forgot you were wearing a dress
as you exited the afternoon doorway
using the ladder we leaned against dreams

and climbed just high enough to be heavenly


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daark




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Eusta B. Mae
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1 posted 2010-11-08 11:39 AM


Oh D...Nobody inks it like you...and they say tattos are addictive...ebm
JerryPat
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2 posted 2010-11-08 11:53 AM


I understand that heavenward climb. Very nice work.
Martie
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3 posted 2010-11-08 12:16 PM


DS...I love looking through you eyes here, at more than just words.
s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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4 posted 2010-11-08 12:20 PM


Your word play and imagery always amazes me. Enjoyed this.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

Prasad Nataraj
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5 posted 2010-11-08 12:28 PM


Fine writing Dark.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2010-11-08 02:18 PM


ms ebm, thanks lady friend

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jerrypatm thanks much jp, I appreciate your reviews

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ms martie, thanks little neighbor

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ms sinz, thanks babe for the eyes here

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prasad, thanks guy for the reads

Earl Brinkman
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7 posted 2010-11-09 09:08 AM


You have some cool lines in this as usual ... the maple leaves are tattoos again, playing god or godless again, and forgot you were wearing a dress.  Most people would be lucky to have one LINE, but three?!!
Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2010-11-09 09:38 AM


Thanks eb..you bless me sir
Amaryllis
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9 posted 2010-11-09 10:55 AM


oops missed this one... captivating, as always from your pen, Daark~  
~A

Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2010-11-09 11:29 AM


thanks ms a'mary
Angel4aKing
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11 posted 2010-11-09 08:27 PM


You've definitely captured a moment with this one...

~~~kingsangel~~~

Dark Stranger
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12 posted 2010-11-09 09:23 PM


thanks angel lady
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