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Open Poetry #46
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eminor_angel
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since 2003-05-22
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0 posted 2010-11-06 05:01 PM

You and I


this chimera of us
                feels good like sin
like finding asylum
                like knowing you won't get caught
you're my wind and sails
                you're my prized possession
come be my anchor
                        and I'll hold you down
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JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30
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1 posted 2010-11-06 05:35 PM

Interesting play on words here and much to my liking. Very innovative.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!
Cpat Hair
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2 posted 2010-11-06 06:18 PM

very nice.. enjoyed the form and the play on words....

good stuff!
s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
3 posted 2010-11-07 09:57 AM

I like it, especially the last two lines. Enjoyed this.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."
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