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Liar, Liar |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY 
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"Liar, Liar." the whisper taunts. Calling me out, calling my bluff. "Liar, Liar." It won't go away. The voice is getting- terrifically louder. "Liar, Liar." "Why?" I ask. I'm not sure of what I've done. I sit in confusion, wondering why. My very essence accuses me. "Liar, Liar." -Trina. "To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose." |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Oh those internal battles can make one weary sometimes...... You really are very good at expressing such great ideas with such an economy of words. Eric |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Indeed, they do. If I could murder those "internal" monsters- I would.  Thanx for looking in Eric, I appreciate it.  -Trina. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Ah, methinks you wrote about this . . . "To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose." . . . And if so, you did it well. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Any truth that causes more harm to a loved one in a right account, is worth a lie. Consience is great tool to have, its keeps us human. Fine writing. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Jerry, Prasad - Thanx for looking in. -Trina. |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
If I spin this, the very fact that one would accuse oneself of being a liar makes them truthful in essence. Daring humbleness lifts this poem above the ordinary. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I talk to myself all the time but, since I'm such a liar, I never believe me  Very cute... |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
A fine poem about inner conflict. When to tell the truth and when to keep it bottled inside and deal with the guilt. Very deep. |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Earl, I like your spin.  Balladeer, I think i'd find your conversation with yourself rather interesting.  Bastet, conflict? haha I upgraded to "Civil War". Thanx, for looking in. -Trina. |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Trina- This blew me away...you so nailed it. |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Thanx for looking in Mae. -Trina. |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
loving the way you did this! |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
"What a tangled web we weave..." I understand this... though I do hope you don`t listen to that inner censor. Keep writing over & above it, as you do! My best~ Amaryllis |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Brad, Thanx! Amaryllis, I've secretly strangled that little voice. Thanx. -Trina. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
We are our own worst critic... but I try not to listen to those inner demons too often. Nice work. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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