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October Ends Along the Blue
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October Ends Along the Blue |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Clouds have usurped the sky And are only lighter shades of the grays The trees have become with bark and lichen Holding the few russet leaves that have not Grown restless with the wind November weights the moon Till she tilts her head in sigh Then slips on the gauze she wears when modesty Demands the reveal of lovers skin be left To private eyes and slow of open hands October ends in anemic rain Two miles below Taylor’s Ford The Blue settles into a long stretch of languid Wearing the glitter of fallen reds That fails to hide the subtle tones of skin As she stretches along her bed But for the wind one can stay warm enough To remember how she used to sigh murmured syllables Against the thigh as she caressed the tired of soul In a seduction of hymns sung quietly within The throat she bared to fingertips I held her then But the span between thumb and tip of little finger for my hand can not cover the distance between the soft round sound of vowels and the gap as exists from one precipice of reality to the dreams of fairy tale Yet It fits well on the clavicle where it might rest contently as connection between thoughts of her so hidden within the parsecs of time and the now I try to hold in delicate balance Perhaps no divine spark is pictured by outstretched hands and all that exists beyond the moment is the one to follow the hole left in us all when as leaves we turned shades of winter and fell from some grace or the palms of broken ends Would I that the distance were not so great and the fall so filled with cold That I could feel the warmth of her again But this month ends in languid rage As November waits the moon’s passing nude And grey usurps the sky Leaving me restless with the wind Until I drift into Thoughts Of you [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (10-31-2010 12:24 PM).] |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Beautiful Images! I love it. "when as leaves we turned shades of winter and fell from some grace or the palms of broken ends" Ahh....these lines  -Trina. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ms Trina... you're very kind.. thank you for your eyes on this and such kind words |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oooooo you're killing me here. This is breathtaking poetry at it's finest. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Would I that the distance were not so great and the fall so filled with cold That I could feel the warmth of her again ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I read you and feel so much. Hey, congrats on 12000 posts!! Woooohooooooooo! You go Captain!!!! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ms Blues... you're far too kind ma'am... and I am honored the words might touch you in some way I only hope they brought you warm... |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Such a gorgeous tribute to Fall, wrapped in your tapestry of language... truly enjoyed this, and agreeing with sinfullyinnocent re: the lines: `When as leaves we turned shades of winter and fell` just... wow...lovely  ~A |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Thank you for the nice words ma'am... you're entirely too kind.. |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Your gorgeous words caressing the Blue with such passion makes a woman wish she was that river to have such words devoted to her. It is a beautiful dream you share with us. Thank you. ebm |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ms EBM... not sure a woman would want my scribblings written about her.... but it is so very nice of you to say so. hope you had a good weekend ma'am |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
anemic rain... just enough to stick the dust to the window, hey? What a pairing of words... sigh. I want my specific to come back... but my muse is still on haitus! Sending warm hugs... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Muses are a fickle lot... seems they desert you or are like a bad rash and leave you scratching at paper all the time. Not much happy in between... thanks for looking in ma'am... wishing you warm as well... we're in for a hard freeze tonight they say, so goes the warm.... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Cpat Beautiful summary in the last three verses. The entire piece is filled with clever metaphours and vivid images. Much enjoyed!! Eric |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...you paint October with crushed leaves of the heart. I always appreciate where your pen takes me. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
So very happy to see some familiar (familial?) faces round here! And this! Is a reading as comfortable as an old flannel shirt. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Eric, appreciate your kind words sir..glad there was something in this to please |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Martie m'friend... your nice words touch.. thank you ma'am... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Brother Ed... good to see you too! I'm pleased you found it comfortable... thank you |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Fine imagery. Fine writing. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
~*~*~*siiigh~*~*~ xoxoxoxoxo |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Prasad, many thanks sir for your eyes and your nice words |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Belle... you honor me with your sigh.. my humble thanks... |
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