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Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

0 posted 2010-01-31 08:06 PM

Like Jonah in the belly of the whale,
Bones and other gamin and gamine
find shelter on a cold winter night
in the belly of an old, derelict,
steel boiler drum
in the corner of the scrap yard
down by the railroad tracks.

Thankfully they have enough privacy
to build a small fire in one end of the drum.
The smoke drifts out the portal
into the cold, black night.

Bobby

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

1 posted 2010-01-31 08:32 PM

Love this, I remember doing things like that, Bobby. Kids don't have that kind of freedom today.
Ida

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

2 posted 2010-01-31 08:45 PM

Thanks dear Ida,

I'm pleased that this poem worked for you.

If the truth were know, kids here in our poor old hood still do have such freedoms.

They are a constant source of inspiration.

Love Bobby

viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

3 posted 2010-01-31 11:54 PM

This was a good one, bobby.

Paul

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

4 posted 2010-02-01 12:09 PM

Thanks Paul,

For your kind words. I'm very pleased that you enjoyed this little poem.

Bobby

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2010-02-01 11:10 AM

sounds like some of the fires I've built in my time

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2010-02-01 12:04 PM

You succeeded in conveying the atmosphere of those days very well, dear Bobby. The strangest places get cozy when we share it with friends.

Love,
Margherita

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

7 posted 2010-02-01 05:22 PM

Thanks dear Passing shadows,

As you know, fires are good for keeping warm, and also cooking stuff.

I hope the poem brings back good memories for you.

Love Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

8 posted 2010-02-01 05:23 PM

Thanks dear Margherita,

What you say is very true. I'm pleased the poem worked for you the way it did.

Love Bobby

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

9 posted 2010-02-02 09:28 PM

Nicely done!

I've loved the notion of "the belly of the whale" as a setting for a poem for quite a while.

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

10 posted 2010-02-02 09:51 PM

Thanks Wranx,

I think large dark spaces where you can't see your way, but can only hope about are important subjects.

I'm pleased it worked well for you.

Bobby

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2010-02-09 06:12 PM

A nice slice of life...Reminded me of a winter when me and my friend motorcycled up to Big Bear and it was very cold on the way up and that evening it started to snow..fortunately for us we found refuge in a small church...a door had been left unlocked, and we slept on the pews...James

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

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Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

12 posted 2010-02-09 07:37 PM

Thanks James,

Churches are a good place to sleep if you don't have anywhere else.

Bobby

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

13 posted 2010-04-28 01:10 AM

Some of your Bones` poems make me go `Wow`! This is one of them.

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

14 posted 2010-04-28 07:53 AM

Thanks Earl,

For the WOW.

That's winter for you, isn't it?

Bobby

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