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Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

0 posted 2010-10-29 02:24 AM

Sorrow

Fisted fingers swipe the tears
Darkness hides the path they make
There is no end to twisted cries
Lost inside the endless ache

Lost inside the endless ache
Thrive clichés intent to heal
As if to ease rage that builds
Anger feeds the need to feel

Anger feeds the need to feel
Breaking down to break apart
Frame the wound, rage serves to fill
Endless pain from broken hearts

Endless pain from broken hearts
Bridging those whose sorrow knows
Time will ease, but never mend
Open wounds where tears are stowed

-

Alison

(This is not about me)

[This message has been edited by Alison (10-29-2010 10:51 PM).]

Eusta B. Mae
Senior Member

since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

1 posted 2010-10-29 08:20 AM

For it not being it about you, you have a very understanding and compassionate heart. I like the way you put this one together. Great stuff as per your usual. ebm

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2010-10-29 09:14 AM

very nicely done ma'am... I like the form and your rhyme. Your understanding of the emotional content is strong and well conveyed...

truly enjoyed reading you here

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

3 posted 2010-10-29 10:25 AM

Like Cpat. I like the form, and the flow. Enjoyed this.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

4 posted 2010-10-29 10:40 AM

Thank you - for reading and understanding.

xooxo
Alison

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

5 posted 2010-10-29 11:13 AM

ali-san..so you have been watching "days of our wives" or "hung and restless" huh?

enjoyed the weave you used..

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

6 posted 2010-10-29 11:42 AM

`Breaking down to break apart`... oh how true~ poignant write, Alison
Best~
Amaryllis

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

7 posted 2010-10-29 01:50 PM

poignant and so true

yann

Misty Lilacs
Senior Member

since 2005-11-15

Posts 1060
White Birch Forest

8 posted 2010-10-29 02:04 PM

Awesome Alison ... I know this type of poem has a name but for the life of me I cannot remember. Anyway, it was great and I certainly understand that feeling!

ooxx Marti

"I am using this cane as a fashion statement. It's the newest trend in accessories."

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

9 posted 2010-11-19 01:27 AM

DS, Yann, Marti ...

Thank you.

xoxoxo
Alison

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