Open Poetry #46 |
Shadowland |
Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Shadowland He calls to only me so quietly so soft come and I ache with aches indescribable, the pain so freshly wrought. He cries out to me, beseeching, so quietly, come to me In shadows he stands, I reach and fail to reach and shed silent tears, weeping only he hears come to me, my love and would I do anything give anything lose everything to once again go to him come to me Yes I would, I would sacrifice all to once again lay in his arms hear his heart beat touch warm skin come O, my love… ~*~ 2000; 2004 |
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Yuka Member
since 2010-08-19
Posts 71china |
this is so moving make one becoming softer and softer and sad |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
"and would I do anything give anything lose everything to once again go to him" this is what I'm taking away. Thanks for baring your beautiful heart. -Trina. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I see the romantic is showing.... (chuckling) certainly nothing wrong with that.... shadowland can get to you if you aren't careful... |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
You are a woman after my own heart, dear one. I felt this one to the core. EBM |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Loved this one...one of the best of yours I've read...last line though rang sort of "flat"...didn't fit the 'flow', although the premise did...maybe something like come O, my love . . . come to me ...anyway, we all "hear" differently...loved this for sure...as usual.... jimmy |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun..would be fun to watch your eyes and lips as your read this one out loud. enjoyed it |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
most finely Romantic! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
love and sweet surrender Karilea perfect |
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Didymus Junior Member
since 2008-05-01
Posts 33USA |
New grief conjures memories of loss from long ago And not so long ago It comes to us all does it not I am saddened to read of the loss of your friend This journey grief leavened with joy One has no meaning without the other Or so we’re told It seems to me that you and I At least for the right here and our right now could might Do with a little less grief May the sun and wind always be at your back The Wind to fill your sails The Sun to light your way Didymus |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
An emotional piece that can not fail to touch the reader. In some ways sad, in others romantic. I bow to you and yours. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Filled with intense emotion, dear Karilea. Haunting. Love, Margherita |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
fine wirting. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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