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Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

0 posted 2010-10-10 03:09 PM

Like a cobra in a basket
he coils.
Head rises as he watches
those around him
through windows,
half closed,
to hide his avaricious soul.
He sways to the visual clue
of the snake charmer's flute,
for it is he who calls the tune,
as the serpent
dances his way
to a position of power.
Ida Werrett

Andrew Scott
Member Elite

since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

1 posted 2010-10-10 05:02 PM

The devil working his minion? Watching the masses and seeking a position from which he can gain the greatest control. The proverbial snake in the grass. At least that's how I read it. I recommend a shotgun or a mongoose for such problems.

Bastet
Member

since 2010-05-07

Posts 246

2 posted 2010-10-10 11:42 PM

A wonderful metaphor (the cobra and his charmer) for certain human personality problems.Well thought out poetically expressed.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2010-10-11 06:50 AM

well captured metaphor..which can be used for so many things from politics, to personal relationships...to business

enjoyed ma'am...

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2010-10-11 10:13 AM

Impressive, dear Ida, well done!

Love,
Margherita

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2010-10-11 10:00 PM

Nice...James

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

6 posted 2010-10-11 11:04 PM

most interesting and effectively penned !!

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

7 posted 2010-10-12 03:59 AM

Thank you my friends for reading and commenting. I think I will let everyone apply their own "serpent" here.
Ida

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

8 posted 2010-10-12 05:11 AM

hello Ida, very interesting poem the snake as a mirror and a will I guess, nice to discover a new penning.

regards

yann

Eusta B. Mae
Senior Member

since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

9 posted 2010-10-12 09:10 AM

Unique intriguing read. enjoyed. ebm

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

10 posted 2010-10-12 10:40 PM

I would tend to think of the danger more as greed, brutality and wanton powerlust than avarice per se. A little honest avarice in "enlightened self-interest" helps make civilized economies work. To be honest, though, one can't lose compassion nor condone sharp practice... When that happens, things fall apart, and the fix can take longer than expected.

There, you have drawn me out with your well-composed and thoughtful poem! Thanks...?

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

11 posted 2010-10-12 10:50 PM

You're welcome...?

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

12 posted 2010-10-12 11:10 PM

Okay, thanks!

Darn good write, gets a sounding board effect from this reader.

Prasad Nataraj
Senior Member

since 2008-05-29

Posts 1149
Bangalore,India

13 posted 2010-10-15 05:03 AM

fine wirting Ida.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

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