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passing shadows
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0 posted 2010-09-28 03:08 AM

It's been thirteen days
and it will be ten more.
I want to say I'll make it
even though I'm on the floor
crawling, bawling, sprawling,
scrawling love poems that keep me sore.

See, it's low fifties now at night
and this kind of cold gets to the bone.
I don't think I can take it,
still, I will say I'll make it,
even though I'm dying here alone.

I try not to think about you
or look at pictures for long.
But the tinge of desperation lingers
and pounces upon my fingers
as I turn a poem into a song.

I suppose that's the reason
I busted the guitar.
I just couldn't take it,
probably won't make it
very far.

© Copyright 2010 Dixie Lee Bullington - All Rights Reserved
since 2010-08-19
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1 posted 2010-09-28 04:55 AM

you will make it , i believe
Eusta B. Mae
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2 posted 2010-09-28 08:09 AM

passing shadows-Just breathe sweetie..just keep on breathing. ebm

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3 posted 2010-09-28 08:37 AM

yes, breathe and hold on...

I am sure you will..... make it.

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4 posted 2010-09-28 09:16 AM

Solitude in fall adds to the melancholy of nature's performance. You write so intensely, dear Dixie. Of course you are going to make it. Always walk for a while in the sun when it comes out, it will brighten your day, while you wait.


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5 posted 2010-09-28 05:47 PM

Of course you will make it, get wrapped up and get out into the weather and wilderness and describe what you see, give us the window on your world. We can see by poems such as this that you can write great poetry, now transform the outside to the the inside..of our brains and tell us the changing colours, the wind, the sky,water, the sounds, the touch, the taste, let us visualise your world, then stand back and admire your masterpiece....thanks for this one...


Friendship is Love without his wings. Lord Byron.

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6 posted 2010-09-28 07:38 PM

good advice...even on my darkest days a sudden low burst of sunlight,a tiny bird singing, a late butterfly is a great pick me up. A great poem, thanks for sharing.
serenity blaze
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7 posted 2010-09-28 08:24 PM

*touching the screen*

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8 posted 2010-09-29 03:00 AM

Face it, guitars bust too easy. Thanks for the write! An appreciated read.
Misty Lilacs
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9 posted 2010-09-29 05:17 AM

Dixie, I am sending you hugs and good thoughts. I know you will make it!!

ooxx  Marti

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10 posted 2010-09-29 10:10 AM

The cold that goes all the way to the bones that is the worse yourself a body pillow with a picture of him on it ..... hope he returns soon!!!


Earl Brinkman
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11 posted 2010-10-06 07:45 AM

Nice poem and I think that you will probably make it given some time.  Hang in there.
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12 posted 2010-10-06 02:08 PM

Dixie girl...cold...and heat can make people crazy stupid. But you still beat the sound of those sensations into a good poem!
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13 posted 2010-10-17 02:27 AM

I do so enjoy your poetry my friend, thank you for sharing.


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