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Open Poetry #46

Her Faith

Zeigeist
Member

since 2009-12-09

Posts 311
Michigan

0 posted 2010-01-25 09:41 PM

Her Faith

It was, I guess,
A matter of trust.
Faith is such a thin line
For lives to hang on.
Her eyes saw only
The best in me.
I gave her only the worst.
Effort was enough to
Make it last for a few years.
Finally,the inertia slowed and
it ran its course.

The ghosts of us
Still haunt my life,
More powerful in the aftermath
And having more of an impact now
Then ever when it was real.

Her faith,
too thin a line
to hang a love on.

Zeitgeist

[This message has been edited by Zeigeist (01-26-2010 05:45 PM).]

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2010-01-26 09:56 AM

Powerful write.
Consider editing your last line for impact,
..."Too thin a line
to hang a love on".
This is awesome!

A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

2 posted 2010-01-26 10:58 AM

I can see the love "hanging" on the line...great poem!

Zeigeist
Member

since 2009-12-09

Posts 311
Michigan

3 posted 2010-01-26 05:47 PM

Thanks TD,
For your praise and your advice.

Zeitgeist

Zeigeist
Member

since 2009-12-09

Posts 311
Michigan

4 posted 2010-01-26 05:49 PM

Thanks RH,
for your kind words.

Zeitgeist

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

5 posted 2011-01-05 06:07 PM

very nicely written...i like everything about this poem...nothing to fault!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

6 posted 2011-01-05 06:09 PM

i like your style and am looking forward to reading more of your work

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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